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Ah, the days of red kryptonite on "Smallville," and back when they called it red meteor rocks because they hadn't heard of Krypton, this takes me back. Sweet.

Like you, I got sick of Lana at a certain point and I'm guessing the writers must have, too, though their method of breaking up Clana was ridiculous. Would've been a nice change of pace if Clark and Chloe had given things a try during the ten years.

Chloe dosent exactly have a moral high ground either...

and shes very demanding of him - unrealistically so

I actually liked this story. I would really like to see a sequel to this though. It's that good. So please consider it. The writing was really good and I am happy to see that Clark was pursuing a relationship with someone else besides Lana. Even though I am a strong clois fan I am interested in seeing where this might lead too. If you need help writing or something I would be glad to help.

loved it 3

Good story
Would like to see a sequel.

Nice work. The paragraph structure with this chapter was a lot easier to read then the last one.
I liked the way you wrote Clark's thoughts about Chloe and Lana. .
Looking forward to seeing where this story goes.

i mean writing, sorry, for the miss type

please keep writting

I say go for the sequel!, You don't see many Chlark stories anymore. :( (which in and of itself is disappointing) And honestly Using "Rush" as the background/starting point is Great. (haven't seen it done, too many time's.) If you post them i'll read all you got :D Hope to see much more in the future.

Quick update! :D

The spacing is quite a bit better compared to the first chapter. Thanks for the response in the chapter. It's always nice to know that the author took the time to read and respond to your review. :)

But what I meant by them being OOC is the way they speak; when they talk they frequently admit their own faults and flaws as viewed by the viewer and act rather emotionless. e.g. In the fic Lana admitted her fault in not trusting Clark many a time, whereas in the show she would have instead simply asked him to stop being dishonest, and the way Clark seems to analyze everything in a straightforward and logical manner. It just comes out a little bit automaton, if you know what I mean?

But that's just my personal opinion, and other than that this is a great fic. I have enjoyed it thus far. :)

This was a very interesting chapter and what I wished would have happened after Rush as they've said time and time again all it does is lower his inhibitions and he didn't exactly run after Lana.

Now, not trying to be harsh but can you leave a line each time someone talks. I read it a couple times as Chloe hesitating about going out with Lana.

Great starter chapter! Decent length, interactions were good and I quite liked the character of the fic. I like the plot too; no matter how many times this particular point in time is gone over or changed it never gets old.

That being said my only problems were the lack of spacing (refer to other review) and certain words being misspelt (though I've noticed that ffn seems to do that itself for some reason...) and some mischaracterization (certain behavioural patern's of Clark that don't fit or things that the characters wouldn't normally say.)

Overall, great start, I'm looking forward to seeing more!

If you ever want someone to go over or beta for you before you post feel free to send a wave my way, I'm happy to help in any way possible! :)

New Chlark Story :D bout time. looks like it will be a good one. cant wait for a update