Well done!

Aww... I really enjoyed reading this. You're describing Leo's feelings and Donnie's reactions so lively! Thanks for sharing it!

im crying because i LOVE DONNIE and to see him cry and see him truly mad makes me want to cry. ;( ;(

Ahhh soooo cute!
Love ya!

This was nice. Good insight on Donnie's feelings on the matter of what happened to Timothy.

this is a great story!

Aww how cute! Love it:)

Nice story, but I'm not surprised - you are one incredibly talented author! I'm so happy to read your wonderful stories! xoxo

This is a beautifully written last line was so sweet!

Awww such a touching story!

Great story! I love how Donnie and Leo interacted. Both are written perfectly in-character. Also, I loved how we got an insight on Leo's feelings of guilt. The episode concentrated on Donnie, so reading another approach was nice. Awesome job!

This is so touching and sad! Beautifuly well done!

This was wonderfully written. I loved the description and emotion into it. This is one of my new favorite stories about Timothy's mutation.

Dear Flynne,

Please keep writing TMNT stories...forever. You are so very good at it! I love everything about your style and word painting. I just love this piece. I love it so much. I'm sorry I've been a terrible reviewer. I read this some time ago and didn't take the time to review. I know, shame on me. But! I'm here now. You really captured Don and Leo, the pathos of this whole story arch.

I must admit I was SHOCKED to see the *fabled* kid cartoon let the heroes 'fail' (in a way) in such a big way. However, it opened the door for this story. Don is sensitive and carries so much on his shoulders. This type of failure is the perfect storm to instigate this sort of emotion in Don.

And...check this out: Regret rose like bile, tasting thick and bitter in Leo's mouth. "Donnie..."

Did you read it? That's right - prime flavor writing. I love it!

On a separate note, 'sha' means (as direct as possible) 'worker' or 'doer'. You scored the correct word combination. :) It's something directly translated to 'foot soldier person' or 'foot soldier worker'. For the US persuasion it is more like - person who is a foot soldier. Those silly, yet awesome, Japanese with their concise verbiage. _

- Harley

This story is simply wonderful!

I loved that you chose Leo to be the one to comfort Donatello, and both of them were so in-character. The guilt radiates off of Donatello, and this has to be one of the most, if not THE most accurate depiction of the aftermath of "The Pulverizer Returns" I've read. Leo's so caring toward Don, doing is utmost to try and take some of the guilt off his shoulders, and it's a well-done story. I hope you write more in the future!