That was long... and I dun have much to say really since I'm not in a critic mood atm. Sowwy.
The chapter was pretty good, and it had a lot of cool fights going on.
I had anticipated what happened with Mitsuru was just about what I'd imagined.
Also, charm ruins everything.
Keep it up!

Good news first: so far, I don't mind the story, I think it will be interesting as it continues.

Bad news: Grammar.

First of all, you seem like you have a phobia of commas. I would be hard pressed to find one in the story.

Second, the character's speech patterns. Igor doesn't seem like one that would say "I am the all-seeing Igor", it's very out-of-character. Also, when the team entered Tartarus, Minato called Mitsuru by her first name, and nothing was said, but the second time it happened when he saved her, the fact he said her first name was mentioned.

Third. This one is just a single mistake I noticed at the end of the chapter. The unknown character says something like "you were taking too long this time universe." I think Universe should be capitalized when using it as a nickname for Minato.

Sorry if the review seems a bit negative, but hopefully it can improve the fic a bit.

I'll will never stop reading it. you are stuck with me :-D

I'm sorry that I could not leave a review last time. It seems that I missed the update. My apologies. Anyways, That fight was fucking awesome! I kinda like how powerful Minato is! Let's hope that he can get Thanatos soon. Thanatos can wreck shit like no other!

Dude! I wanted to review this chapter because I really feel it's best left as is. My favorite parts undoubtedly were the descriptions of Rise :) I liked the way she was described in moments of shyness. This line was awesome: "He noticed the faintest details the way her nose pointed. How her slender fingers danced on the way her cheeks curved. How they became a cute pink when she blushed. When she blushed?"
You used so few words to pain her appeal and even suggested the idea she was equally interested in the observer, while she was being 'observed'. Ken's development is going well but sadly I can't really help on that front as I'm hopeless at writing for Ken. I do like him I swear! Haha, but I just can't write for him for some reason. Aki and Shinjiro's conversations are going true to character too. I can't offer any suggestions there, in fact I've always been so afraid of doing that part wrong that I avoided the encounter in my story... But now you're beginning to make me think it'd be worth it. After all it is nice when those two have their 'man-talks'!
I'm really surprised how you painted the end! Mitsuru got served! Haha, this is nice in ways to see things come full circle and I think you did that part well. I'm interested to know how she's going to make amends. Either way, good to see you making her work hard for it!
Maybe we can work on a part 2 of this final chapter, rather than reupload it? Let me know buddy and we can brainstorm some ideas and I'd be more than happy to write out a final confrontation for you between whom you'd like.

Aaaaaah, I want to know what happen next! I like the chapter very much:D, I hope there will be more minato and mitsuru in the next chapter:)

Poor Mitsuru, go and get your self a new man that loves you back!

I find it slightly ironic how soon after Minato leveled up (or reforged?) the Lovers Arcana, he causes a massive heartbreak for Mitsuru. How antagonizing. On another note, since Shinji's persona evolved, I've wanted to see the evolved forms for the personae of Strega. This also brings about a question: Junpei's persona evolved through not ony resolution, but the fusion of Hermes and Medea (explains how Junpei gets Spring of Life), so if Minato was to force Junpei's persona to evolve, would it still become Trismegistus or something new? Either way, like the bit of Minato X Rise action going on, and can't wait for the next chapter.

Just in two words: I like it... Actually, that makes three. But still, the story is pretty good with nice ideas. I wish that you make the next chapter soon.

Haha, you do the interaction with Yukari and Junpei really good. Junpei comes across successfully goofy and Yukari is snappy, yet still likeably caring.
Nice job attempting your own lyrics this time around too! The painter’s only masterpiece analogy was the highlight and nice imagery created with the café :)
Nice how Rise was craving Minato’s number too! The Mitsuru scene has me curious. If she was so ice cold in the start, and now she’s so upset by what she’s done, I’m interested to know why she did what she did in the first place if she’s actually so sensitive in your story deep down. Guess I’ll find out soon!

Now that was a good idea to bring in Rise! And nice work with the parking :P I liked seeing Rise’s response to Minato’s music too. Your writing is improving as you go along, my only advice here is don’t be afraid to show some of Minato’s limitations so you can sell your supporting characters like Rise a little more and help readers relate best with the MC :)
For example Minato parks as you described but then as he gets out of the car he drops the keys or something, and she finally breaks a smile after a long day that helps her get through her shoot. I dunno, that’s a stupid example I guess, but I’m sure you get what I mean. Other than that keep it up man!

Nice! I don’t know if this is bad of me but I quite enjoyed the justice of Akihiko guilt tripping Mitsuru :) I felt bad for her but also like she deserved it. I really liked the final big paragraph (two lines before second page break), it was well written and really got across the psyche’s damage which your story is based on – the lines where Akihiko explains to Mitsuru how his new friends were the first he came to trust after the loss of his parents and that betrayal was why it hurt so deep.

This was a neatly structured chapter with some nice interactions with Tanaka :) He’s a lot more likeable in your story than I found him in the P3 game! I like how he’s helping push Minato out there, it’s a good concept which adds depth using canon setting to your improvised lyrics use. Nicely planned!

I also really liked how Minato asked if he could break some of the social links like his own state! That was a cool concept and left me with something interesting to ponder. Keep it up!

Hmm, a little more constructive criticism for you brother: I liked the idea for the chapter start a lot but the rap concert didn’t do it for me so much as your other stuff. Your descriptions were awesome but they didn’t match the moment through rap, I don’t think. One line in particular was amazing and I think you could use it much better with a fight scene :) “To rival the sounds of ten thousand suns exploding”. When you have creative flares like that save them as trumps for e.g. the sound when Orpheous’ and the Reaper’s all out clash occurs. Just some suggestions for writing improvement buddy. Now… The rest of the chapter… Awesome! Elizabeth drunk, slurring and inching closer to Minato! Hell yeah! Haha, I wanted more to happen or it to go on a little longer :) The song at the end also was really well used to bridge an excellent emotional connection between Elizabeth and Minato!

Hahaha, loved the line Minato said to Elizabeth as they entered Escapade. “I dunno but you sure are crazy”. That was golden! I also found the imagery of Elizabeth dancing around rather cute for some reason, haha guess 'cause she’s such an eccentric figure XD

Wow, I really like the way Elizabeth is described through her dancing, I could visualise a softness in her affect and the little movements described left a nice picture in my mind :) “For once it seemed they might become something more than friends” describes the scene really well… But it was bitter sweet (In a good way) when they broke apart at the end of the song. I liked it.

Also, you’ve really good a good grasp on Elizabeth’s way of speaking, it really feels in tune with canon. I’ve always struggled with her odd yet charming nature.