I loved it! Thank you for writing.

Oh, the emotional turmoil was fantasticaly protrayed. I would love to read more.

Oh boi this fic shot me in the heart yikes good writing loved it

Absolutely beautiful use of metaphor

Wow this is one of the most incredible things I have ever read. It's absolutely stunning. Perfection. And I mean that in the highest forms.

*screams for several minutes* That. Was. Amazing. Like, one of the best post-Reichenbach fics I've ever read. The raw emotion conveyed, the perfect analysis of John and Sherlock's friendship, and the characters' reactions are so beautiful and perfect and I love it. Thank you for sharing your gift.
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Fabulous! You did a wonderful job of writing deep male friendship without the slightest taint of slash. How refreshing! The bullet wound analogy was brilliant!

Wow. I like this.. I forgot it was F.F and thought I was watching the original show!

Can you please make a sequel?

Oh wow. That was incredible. I feel like there's a hole through me now. Ow, my heart.

I especially loved the extended metaphor of Sherlock-as-bullet ripping through John's life. The way you carried that throughout the piece is masterful. And Sherlock giving John lungs? And now he can't breathe because he's taken them back? Wow. Amazing. Simply wonderful.

This is riddled with grammatical errors and typos, which is endlessly distracting, but it doesn't seem to matter. The lack of dialogue helps give the narration that disconnected feel you were going for. The ending was a tad weak given the strength of the part before it. However, you have some amazing imagery and you use run-ons exceedingly well. (I particularly loved the paragraph right after the one describing Holmes' jump.)

This - this was gorgeous :)

I loved the analogy of the bullet that you've used here. I think it's not only fitting for the situation, but also just as fitting for John to use it, seeing as he is a military man.

You've described his emotions beautifully here - you've explored his friendship with Sherlock to what I believe is near perfection, and you've explained every emotion he feels without outrightly stating the sheer amount of grief and rage.

I particularly liked the part when he confronts Anderson and Donovan. While I, probably like you, have some slight sympathy with the two of them for the way Sherlock treats them, they're just dislikable characters on the whole. There's no reason that two grown people should hold a grudge so childishly, and for so much amount of time, and I can definitely see John losing it at them once the dust settles and the truth begins to sink in.

This was, as I said, gorgeous. You've filled in the gap between Sherlock's "death" and the scene in the graveyard brilliantly with this piece - well done! :)

This story was a bullet.
That hurt.
It was beautiful, but it hurt.

I think this first foray into Sherlock is very good. I think you carried of the stream-of-consciousness sort of perspective from John extremely well, and his state of mind was very believable, very gripping. I feel that you absolutely nailed his characterization.

I loved the explanation about the bullet's entry vs exit wound. I think you explained it well, and it not only fit in very naturally but greatly enhanced the piece. Wonderful metaphor.

The only criticism I have about the whole story is a bit of a nit-pick. The lungs analogy just didn't work for me, because I couldn't move past the fact that you wouldn't even exist without lungs, so there can be no before and after. But, I'm a bit overly logically minded at times, so that may not bother most readers.

Overall, very, very good story. I hope that you will write more in the Sherlock fandom, because this is top-notch.

This is one of the best depictions of John Watson that I have ever read in my entire life. He was so spot-on. And Greg! I was really impressed with your characterization of Lestrade. He's one of my favorite characters period and you really did him justice. Besides just getting the characters down, I love the whole comparison of Sherlock to a bullet and the exit wound and WOW, bloody brilliant!
There was a small portion of time when I was confused as to where the characters were location-wise, but that was soon cleared up and probably no fault of your own. I'm a little daft sometimes.
I really, really enjoyed this fic and will probably go back to read it many, many more times! Keep up the good work!