I just want to say I absolutely love this book and I’m only now reading this and yeah. Anyway but I just have to I just say I love how you capture th e characters emotion it reminds me so much of them from the anime and manga where I can picture them saying all of this lol. Especially during this chapter if I was Neji I would have said that if they ever landed a finger on his TenTen that he would personally kill whoever does, Clan Elder or not. But keep writing I Love you and your stories

Story sorryis horribly done with the relationships delete the story sorry for the harsh words but it’s true couldn’t read past with what happen between naruto and hinata

A bit odd and confusing but please put Naruto and Hinata together ASAP. You can might as change it to slight romance; drama; hurt & comfort and DRAMA because I'm smelling a lot of that and far to much suspence. Pick a main plot already and stop given us suspension attacks because because you forgot about the Whirlpool Countries PRINCE because as I recall it says that he has to pick between the Leaf and Whirlpool. He can either stay and fight for Hinata from CREAPO and in the war and the Stones Assassin and THE AKATSUKI. Or He can run away to the Whirlpool and take Hinata with him and they can be a couple and one can say shit about. Naruto meets his long lost family in the Whirlpool and make a new family and love with Hinata and they can be the rulers of a small but one of the most powerful countries.

Sorry it was long but I read all 17 chapters in 2 days and had a lot to say about it and I say try to make sense of the story. I hope I helped you think of your opsions to make this story a succes I've a hell of my fair share of fanfiction and your one can do as well if not better than Darth Monkey who wrote but disconnected The Runaways after 50 chapters. I've read a lot of good fanfictions and 75.9% have not been finished after how many years.

DON'T Let US your READERS down. Goodluck

-M-

At last! That pervert got what he deserved!

wait why did they say Naruto?

NooOooooOooOOooooooo! Update more! Sorry for not reviewing for the past 13 chaps. I'm just forcing myself to stay awake with a pounding head and review and read this marvelous ff of yours! (bc its just so greatt) (why did i discover it just now!) i hope you update soon!

With Love
Yukio 3

That pervert! Roast him alive, Naruto!

Please keep going

Please make more fast I really like your ideas please find time for more

Tyai you ass hole! Hinata, why won't you punch that creep?!

Nice cliffhanger! Can't wait to see the Hyuga's reaction!

What is Neji gonna do now!

Neji you jerk!

More naruhina pls!

I hope Naruto will save hinata from her creepy fiance.