im kinda scared how this Sekai will react being rejected by Makoto bro so soon, if she snaps early he'll need to be on his guard so he doesnt get the kitchen knife to the chest again.

Nice Chapter! And I Like How Much Less Of A Jerk This Makoto Is! Now I Wonder...Will This Stay Makoto X Kotonoha Or It Will Be A One True Treesome...Or It Will Be A Repeat Of The So Called Dream?

GOOD LUCK!

The concept is there. I love it. I wanted to read a story with a happy ending to School Days, and here it is.

Two things I noticed with a quick read-through: 1. Makoto at the beginning claims to have never met Sekai, yet they've been childhood friends...
2. Some grammar mistakes, here and there. I could fix them for you if you want :P

Overall great concept, PLEASE CONTINUE.

This is..awesome. I think you should continue this.

I may not be a huge fan of school days. But I like this. Writing a version of School Days where Makoto does the right thing. When are you going to update?

I like this beginning better than the original :)

I am...interested by this idea. Perhaps he won't be such an ass this time around. The only thing I noticed about your writing was, when I focused, you forget to capitalist a lot. Can't wait for the next chapter!

Heyheyhey, it's already one month since you published the 1st chapter, when will you post more?

I'm happy that someone is making a different version of School Days where Makoto doesn't act like an a-hole. I mean, I only watched the some of the good but all of the bad endings and I basically get the whole gist of the show. I will admit that the first time I saw the bad endings, I was a bit tramatized but who wouldn't be after seeing that. *shivers*

Anyway, please update soon! I look forward to what's going to happen next! :D

Lizzy

P.S: I really hope Sekai stays out of their relationship this time! *crosses fingers*

love it! hope sekai wouldn't be able to find a way to hit on him again. i hate her grr

*facepalm* you shamelessly double post chapter. Also, author's note isn't allowed to post as the new chapter due to Rules&Guidelines!

I must say, for your first fanfiction, it is really great. The events was occurred chronologically and you made it great.

There is no problem in your grammar. This would be close as a rewrite of the School Days dialogue. Be careful on that. And, also, keep in mind on your Japanese words.
There are some slight problems on it. Do not worry, it will improve as time pass. Just do your best.

I really like the first part that Makoto thought that he was dead. He did thought of it as a dream. Impressive.

Um...it is me, or everyone, feels this chapter is same as the previous one?

It's great. Much better than others fanfics here! Please, continue!

More...MOAR! Zahmbez here. And Bro...I think it's Amazing how you could turn such a...UNFORGETABLE...anime like School day's...And turn it in to something actualy enjoyable! (I agree...Not a very good first impression on Jap-animations
part...Wasted Two fuckin weeks on that damn show...All for the gruesome ending...Althoug...He DID kind of deserve it. -(T3T)-...
I REALLY enjoyed, bro! plez make more...
(P.S...I had a bit better luck with MY first anime...Found a cute vid on you-tube called, "Oh my..."...O.O...INSTANT CATCH!
I NEEDED to find where it was from...Turns out it was from a LONG anime called
"Zero No Tsukaima"...BEST. THING. EVER. WITNESSED...You should watch!