I think I might have seen one little misspelled word towards the beginning , but other than that I didn't see anything wrong with this.
I think that the name was spot on since the story was everything I was expecting from reading the title and summary.

Love this story it was cute can't wait for another chapter if you're still making more

Omg this is just so cute between those 2. It's so well-written I love (compare to the others Jesus Christ I seriously thought grammar didn't even exist in this world good lord) I love it so much. You should like turn this into a sequel or just a story in general. I know a lot of people gonna love your story.

I like your warning. All of it.

Argh so good! So well-written! HOW DO YOU KNOW ALL THOSE HARD WORDS QAQ, welp, at least I know a couple of new words -

Great story. It was cute how they both realized that they liked each other

Ah It's stories as well written as this that are the reason I delve into at all anymore

You did really well with this! (Considering how picky I am with stories and how they're written, that is a rather good compliment.)

Just your friendly reader, stopping by to say I liked the story (it was sweet ) I really like just the way you wrote it. (It was different than a lot of fics I read. Btw, I noticed a typo near the end where Ash is talking to Garry about how he would be fine if Garry went on the mission.)

Awwweeee! This was so cute and sweet! Thank you for writing this!

Awww... that was sweet! :D

D'awwwww This is so fluffy and sweet I love it!

Hey
I just wanted you to know that this was
a lovely story and you wrote a good plot
in an one-shot better than I could ever hope to!
-A Friendly Review

This is to freakin Cute! Write more! Moe!

That was so incredibly adorable. As a piece of fluff, I have no criticisms. It made me smile as I read it. Nice work.

Awesome story! Please continue with the great work!