| Reviews for A New Beginning |
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   Magic-Saphira chapter 5 . 7/27 As I said in the previous comment. This story consept and the gammar is good. But after reading this, I find that the characters are quite OOC and it has the reading structure more for younger kids. It reminds me a bit of a Disney story in the way it is written. Bit to simpel. Not for a M rated story. For instance, Bella never says Daddy. It is always Dad or Charlie. And Charlie is even more socially awkward then Bella. So the hugging and baby comment just don' t fit very well. It can be just the beginning of the story, I hope so. |
| Magic-Saphira chapter 4 . 7/27 This story consept and gammar is good, but reading this |
| edwards-sparrow chapter 42 . 7/20 Is there a sequel to this? |
| lashawn chapter 18 . 4/28 Someone really needs to fight Lauren and Jessica. They took bullying to a whole new level. Why weren’t they arrested? |
| GaijinVamp chapter 33 . 3/6 Geez, poor Bella keeps on getting beat up. I guess she's lucky she wasn't drained. |
| GaijinVamp chapter 27 . 3/6 Great gift for Charlie. |
| GaijinVamp chapter 24 . 3/6 There's more to Charlie than he seems. Not just a small town police chief. |
| GaijinVamp chapter 20 . 3/6 Bella and Charlie eat too much pizza! LOL Mean girls make me mad. Crooked cops make me madder. |
| AliceCullen0629 chapter 44 . 2/2 really great story |
| Guest chapter 31 . 10/18/2019 Garrett and Kate? |
| Ealasaid Una chapter 8 . 10/18/2019 why make up? |
| WhiskeyStraight chapter 10 . 8/29/2019 Beautiful Angel. Star Dust. Baby girl. Little One. How many nicknames does one character need? How many times do they need to be used rather than her name? The icing on the cake was "freakish dork" as if the characters were in primary rather than the cusp of adulthood. |
| Guest chapter 28 . 6/17/2019 I will say that I don’t really like her being healed and the whole power thing. Merely because the past helps to form who we are and if you totally erase part of that then you aren’t who you were and for some they might not want that change. |
| Lilly chapter 41 . 6/4/2019 I'm sorry, but this isn't at all believable. There is no way Bella would be able to win against Jasper in a flight. Jasper has what? almost 80 years experience with fighting (most likely daily) and Bella has not even a year, but somehow she can beat him? This is what I don't like with so many fanfics, they make Bella a super-vampire. |
| Guest chapter 44 . 4/28/2019 This was a truly wonderful story and I hope to see more stories from you in the future. Thank you for the dedication, time, and effort you put into this. |
