You could use with a bit better grammar and punctuation, but besides that, it's really good.

So cute. Please write a sequel chapter! :)

That was as sweet as it was hot. Thanks for writing this and you should definitely make more stories for this couple

So many mistakes... For instance, there's a continuity error; Harry would be 16, Astoria's 14, so that means that unless Astoria came to hogwarts early, the Chamber of secrets situation would've been resolved by the time she joined. Then there are all the spelling errors. Especially in the ending note.

Awesome! I love this couple (Harry & Astoria) can you write a Continuation? a new fic?

Some typos, but otherwise a fun bit of smutty fluff. I'd love to see more of them as their relationship develops further (be amusing if her sister ended up joining them).

This could be the start of a nice story. Awaiting more.

pretty awesome story and pairing

I think it would be nice if you somehow got Daphne, the Ice Queen, of Slytherin, to join her sister Astoria, and Harry.

I liked this alot keep up the good work

I think that Harry/Astoria is an interesting pairing, normal I don't read story where there are minors having sex.

Did yoou give to a friend to continue this story?

Ok, the erotic elements are there. The ideal is good but it's mangled with poor spelling and basic mistakes. If you want to make it a longer fic, it needs more plot elements like a prior sexual tension. I'm good at story telling and the grammar-spelling but good plots are my bane. Fave 'A Late Night Lecture' and I'll respond. Or IM me by my writer link from that story.

I absolutely love this. There needs to be more Harry/Astoria stories on here.

Awesome story.