You can make this into a horror story

I like it, it has a very sci-fi twist on the cloning ideal from TLG.

You really portray Artemis's insanity well. I think any version of this would have been great (your writing is superb), but I agree with you that Holly throwing around "I love you" on her deathbed would have been a bit too OOC.

freaky but good :S

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*shaking* oh... my this was sooooo amazing! yes, you read right. it was amazing. I have been searching for good dark fiction and here we got a really well made one. *shivers* Oh.. this is going in my favs for sure.

I write tragedy and dark stories myself and you just activated some sleeping braincelles. Some some ago, last year I believe I had an idea similiar to this, but it was set after TAC and not TLG. I might actually re-write it since the original file was lost...

thanks for the inspiration,

- Arty

OMG that was deep man. Really good too they should make more stories like this

Waaah! This made me cry and I rarely ever cry when I read stuff! It was really well written and you captured an insane Artemis perfectly.

i am bawling my eyes out! ithought it was going to have aq happy ending, not a realistic ending!
so good though!

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god！！i love this story...the Psychological descriptions of Holly are so ...could you please let me translate this story to Chinese？

Woah. Seriously... You... Are... Awesome. Depressing yes, but I love it! Write more or I'll go all artemis on you! Xxx

wow, you really have some issues, huh? My first reaction was "eww". My second was "who write this?" And my third was "Well onto the next story." Your writing style is too dark for me and the characters were all OOC except Trouble.

"Artemis was locked in his lab for a long time forever and when she went in his lab and saw them, Artemis ended up shooting her."
Oh god. This story was so...horrifying already. Really? Why did I read this at 3:20 AM? What kind of frikkin retard am I? XD
Great work.

Now one of my favorite stories. From when Trouble came in up till the end I was murmuring Arty's lines along with him. That was actually quite beautiful.