| Reviews for Design Your Universe |
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Kelorus chapter 5 . 10/12/2019 Quite good yet sad as you forgone it x( |
hotcat chapter 4 . 5/7/2019 pls update |
zamik chapter 5 . 4/12/2019 I love this story. I like Harry in another schools and Abandoned-by-parent(s)!Harry and your Harry is great! antisocial, arrogant, smart and hard-working. I like his (almost) nonexisting feelings I am looking forward another chapter. |
Saturnblue chapter 5 . 1/22/2019 I'm glad you decided to continue the story with people's vote. This promise to be a funny and interesting and maybe a bit dark story to read about. I like it so far and hope to see more of it. Harry cannot run from his problem or confrontation no matter how much he may think or wanted to forever. No matter the race there will be someone who wanted to cause problem for others. It's too bad Harry is too obsess with Riddle to have a completely HP/OMC pairing. Either way it would be interesting to see how Harry develop from this point on and the few allies or friends he may make along the way and the interactions with Riddle among other people. Harry lacked the positive affection from his supposed father James and receiving mostly negative emotions from his so-called relations. How close is the relation with Sirius and Him or Regulus for that matter? Maybe James is too into self pain that he pretty much pushed away his only remains of Lily his son and maybe partially blamed him to for losing his love. What James needs is someone to shock him awake and put his head back on right to remind him that Lily loved Harry more than life itself and he is doing a very poor job of being a father to their love child. He refused to see reality and only wanted to bury his head under the sand in fantasy land to not even try to get close to his son by running away. With him raising Lavender as a daughter James pretty much buried his past pain and past away in this new marriage and put all his energy in something that doesn't remind him constantly of his lost. Snape is no better he is just as bad as James. A child with these type of atmosphere will have a harder time to adjust to social life in circles or public. What they did is disservice to the innocent child himself and disrespect the memory of their supposed love one. (if Snape still hated Harry other than he is James's son and loved Lily at some point before he moved into some sort of relationship with the blacks.) Why didn't Sirius or even Regulus tried to curb Snape's actions toward Harry if their relationship was supposed to be good? What kind the father disown his own son at 16 yrs old, who didn't have much value with him and forced him to go homeless. No matter how it happens or if James said it in a heated moment or he really blamed all the wrongs into Harry just so happens he had a bad day or whatever then it's still wrong of him to disown him but not unforeseen problems that had buildup since the day Lily pasted away. From this point no matter what happened to Harry he had no rights to him any longer. Harry can wash his hands off him unless he still may wanted to get the man's positive feeling for himself. The man had no one but himself to blame where the problem blown up to this point and the situation became like this. Did Harry officially withdrawal from Hogwarts? Or he just left? Does Sirius as Harry's Godfather check on him or find out what happened to him if he didn't show up for any visit that he may or may not show up for? What happened to Remus since there wasn't any mention of him? Does he exist in this timeline? Will you touch on other realms besides Avalon? I'm glad that you make sure there is language barrel within the different realms and not just let them all speak and understand English like it's a Universal language they all or if not most must know and speak. I wonder what the secret of that necklace mentioned from Lily to Harry the protection for him to wear and Not take off. Also the different language Lily wrote and probably speak also in her journal. Also the blood in his self that even the goblin magic couldn't penetrate. Does this have anything to do with him if it refers to him the sacrifice lamb that other races wanted to use him for their own goals. Maybe Lily gives him that protection necklace from other's agenda for him. I hope no matter the reason that Harry doesn't takes off the necklace or let other people take it off him no matter what happens. This story is really mysterious with few hints here and there yet doesn't connect to anything right now. |
Blackstone4005 chapter 5 . 12/30/2018 Oh my, I've come late to this party and the lights seem to be off. I love the concept of alternate schools. This is a Harry I rarely see, so it is also refreshing. I hope you revisit the story someday. Hope springs eternal, etc. I do plan on visiting some of your other works. Your writing style is wonderful. Thanks for all your efforts to entertain us for free. |
blucross chapter 5 . 11/11/2018 This story is fabulous, humorous and witty. I hope you decide it one day! |
relatablesloth chapter 5 . 9/23/2018 i really love the idea of this and how it's going so far! I hope you will continue you this :") |
taidoton chapter 5 . 6/17/2018 I have to admit that this is the first time I've bothered to review anything. Your plots are unique and set apart from the masses, characters have actual personalities and there are no glaring grammatical errors. I would love to see updates on this story. |
Greyline chapter 5 . 9/21/2017 I haven't a clue why you seem to believe your works are anything but imaginative, enjoyable and surprisingly fresh in general. I can see that you, as I, suffer from a somewhat procrastinatory nature but... what you *have* finished and gotten out is mostly of a very high calibre. Or... that might just be me envying your constant straightforwardness again. I love your OCs. It's so hard to flesh out OCs and yours have great personalities - they have proper, ingrained likes and dislikes, things to do, and Harry's interaction with them is natural. Actually, all your dialogue is pretty natural - far cry from some of the more formal, stunted dialogue many use in their work. Would be great to see what's going on back on Earth. This is another interesting AU from you, so I'll just go with the flow on it and try not to speculate about how wizarding society is as a whole in this fic. You'd probably only end up surprising me and proving me wrong anyway, lol. Also, this headmaster seems like a douche from the off. There's always *one*, right? One member of staff/person in a group who insists on ruining everything by being a damn miser (in my group, it's *me*). Anyway, another time... :) |
Luc chapter 5 . 9/15/2017 I see this is from Harrys pov, but I would really like to know how are things back home. Its like an itch, taking a lot of mu attention. Hard to concentrate reading about this new universe. Too bad Tom only comes in chapter ten. This is mellowing out. While this new universe is interesting, its not nearly on the same level with the au!Canon left behing overall. Too many new creatures and honestly, I like harry and the potterverse. So if you want to keep this interesting, think about doing something. |
erikabalaclava chapter 5 . 8/5/2017 I liked! I hope it comes out in a future Tom. |
Rayne G chapter 5 . 6/17/2017 loving this fic , please please write more! |
Solaria Sunstone chapter 5 . 5/28/2017 This is really well written. Surprisingly enough, I really like your OCS and their characterisations. I can't wait to read more and see how the plot develops! xxx |
ObliviousFanatic chapter 5 . 4/3/2017 Poor lonely Harry... Can't wait until the next chapter! |
Guest chapter 5 . 3/23/2017 Loved the fic, thanks for sharing it, it's really original with how you've built the characters! |