Don't you dare stop this story now!
Please write more!

Amazing! I loved it

I loved it! Alty and Maria were spot on, and their interactions were both funny and sweet. Man, I love this ship.

This was very well done, but the thing is, your grammar is very lacking. Really the only thing stopping this story from being perfect is that almost every sentence is structurally wrong, and it really stands out. Would you consider allowing me to run through this, just to point out and fix up some errors? I really do love this story and I would want it to be the best it can be.

This was a really interesting arc. The exploration of their differences. It was never a natural decision for her to pursue a relationship with Altair. I think people forget that. So, it was really good to see a more sedate version of the way they built their relationship. This wasn't done in the heat of the moment. I really enjoyed that.

In the end the have been together.

What how dare you! And a hero appear just in time to keep your pretty face from Maria's angry slap.

I a sadly story for me hope behind Maria is Altair.

Great stuff! Hope you update soon! :)

yeah. this is cool

I cried when I read that last part.. it was perfect.

keep going... i want to read it...

So like the Hobbit this will be a three part. So interesting to read.

Buahhhh, looking forward to second part. Really love your stories about these characters... ahh, we need a new game!

OMG! After you duck the girl you go to find Maria how dare you! Maria didn't desert this.

Amazing- as usual!