I just wanted to point out that Ilos was misspelled a few times, the correct spelling is Ilos, not Illos. Other than that, good work!

That was beautiful and sad.

Aw, Vigil. I love that guy, that sad and lonely VI left in that tomb all by himself. How he seemed to convey hope and hopelessness at the same time whenever he spoke to your Shep. Anyway, I like the story, it definitely hits me where I live, but I feel the repetition is just a tad too much. Don't get me wrong, I think repetition can really add emphasis. But more than three or four times and the reader just starts anticipating, then dismissing it. The Rule of Threes and all. It's not bad, per se, just distracting.

But that last line . . . DAT LAST LINE DOE! Great finishing move! Gave me all the spine-tinglies.

Interesting idea. I liked it. I do remember Vigil, but I can guess why people could tend to forget him.

I love this piece. Love how you're taking a non-entity almost and fleshing him out, a little. I especially like the repetition f your refrain, "I am .vigil." It really sets the mood there for the piece. Beautifully done.

This was wonderful.. I actually felt for the VI, I wanted to help him, so insightful! Thank you for writing this!

Wow, that was awesome. Very well written, I really enjoyed it :)

That was really heartfelt and I could feel the profound sadness behind the vigilance. It was like a glimpse of 50,000 years of lost history. Well done!

Very interesting choice in subject. Being a VI, of course, Vigil is heavily subject to his programming, so it's kind of cool that you have him feeling guilty about saving the few scientists he could. It's a good short.

I like the repetition of My Name Is Vigil. Of course the first repetition was because his prupose to watching over the Protheans had just been explained. The others helped reinforce the idea that he was programmed.
The descriptions of the hall turned into a plant-filled crypt were beautiful.
It's interesting that Vigil felt the most important lives were the scientists. I wonder if that's because it was scientists that created him and placed more value on themselves than the other Protheans, even though they briefly mourned them.
I really liked this story

Wow, I remember the moment when I entered Vigil's bunker for the first time. It was one of my favorite moments in gaming ever, and you captured the feeling well. Vigil is also one of my favorite NPCs in ME1. You make him sound like an AI, though, and the game said he was a VI. But, IIRC, it was said by the Council members and they denied that any true AI other than geth exists. He is too smart to be just a VI.

Oh and Vigil's theme is special. Playing it while curing the genophage on Tuchanka was the smartest move ever done by Bioware.

This is review for the WA review game:

WRITING: I found this pleasant to read. I think you have a good grasp of language, and your prose flows well. I see you have taken pains on your proofreading, so well done.

STORYTELLING: I like the repetition of "I am Vigil" throughout the story, it gives the story a certain stylistic rhythmn that helps mark the passage of the ages.

My biggest beef with this story is that it is merely a recap of canon, told from a different POV, true, but what is told is mostly what we already know. There's not much new added or refreshing in it. You've only re-presented old stuff.

It's well told, and your storytelling structure is good, but there's only so much you can achieve when your subject matter is just a rehash of the already known.

A point I was wondering about:

"Their fight against the Reapers was a pitifully short one"

My memory may be flawed, but I thought that the Prothean war stretched out for centuries? Javik mentioned that when he was born, the Protheans were already at war with the Reapers or something like that.

Of course, that was from ME3, and I don't remember much of ME1, so I presume there was a retcon somewhere.

OVERALL: A good read for a one-shot, but sadly forgettable. I'd like to see you try for something with a bit more original content, I think you would do well.

Very well done. I read it in Vigil's voice the entire way.

I liked this. Just one thing: Vigil was a VI, not an AI. I don't remember if that's explicitly stated in ME1, but I'm pretty sure it is in ME2.