So I had never finished either story, (you were not finished with them at the time) but I knew that the ribbon lead into aces, so here I am doing a double review.. rather more like a double praise, I LOVE THESE STORIES DUDE! I love them. From the bottom of MY heart thank you for making these, they've been so close to my heart (like I've held them so dearly) that 1. I can't think of ace combat and not have the back of my mind on these stories, and 2. I can't read another fan fiction about ace combat because I don't want the story to change lol. I can't wait to start reading the one about zero and I hope you continue to write these. I love you dude thank you for making such wonderful, in-depth, and heart wrenching stories.

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In the games Bishop isn't anyone from any of the Strangereal games. Only the strangereal games are connected to each other. The ones that take place on our Earth are not connected at all. Bishop is technically neither one.

PJ is definitely dead.

Lol, didn't read what you had said about it being a colonized planet for purposes of the story earlier. Or rather didn't notice it, apologies.

I noticed you mentioned real world countries in this story. The problem is that they wouldn't exist except in fictional works in universe. Strangereal is Earth, just an alternate version of Earth. Osea and Yuktobania are the Strangereal equivalent to the USA and Russia. The Unsung War is essentially Cold War era (and maybe Iraq War a bit). The Belkan War was essentially World War 2.

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You should make another fan fiction for this series your making. Most likely Ace Combat 6 fanfic. I read The Ribbon first by the way then this. Everything made perfect sense and you even explained he had repressed memories which helped make this easier to understand. Pretty sure your gonna make the Estovakians have the Grey Men leading them, with Antonio being Garuda 1, oh man I can already see Antonio comforting Shamrock over the death of his wife and daughter because he lost his own already. Maybe when it becomes too much for him to handle he can call in reinforcements from Osea and Yuktobania from the Task Force I mean.
One last thing I need to confirm: Is Harkin Antonio's biological father or not?

While I love a good story that's long and well-developed, the quality of the writing and the author not staying within the context of the world in which he or she is writing just turns me off. Yes, there are races modeled after Caucasians and Orientals in the world of Ace Combat, but those places don't exist in Strangereal.

So here's a suggestion: Go to the Ace Combat wiki and educate yourself on the countries of that universe. And before you post something, make sure you have the correct punctuation and proper sentence structure.

Okay, no offense, but you need to take some English classes.

If you're still on here, I'm spotting a lot of errors in your writing. If you're willing, I'll gladly go grammar Nazi on this and correct them.

Just so you know, I'm a longtime fan of these games. They were my first truly story-driven games and I am eagerly awaiting Ace Combat 7's release later this year. But I believe that if someone is going to write a story about anything, they should take the time to read through their own work and correct any errors there might be. I've noticed misspellings, absent punctuation and improper sentence structure, all of which drive me crazy.

Dear Mr. Blaze118,

It’s my belief that fellow writers try and help each other get better. In following out that belief, I feel obliged to review your story. In your effort to create a Blaze that is unique to all the other stories that are on this site, I think you did yourself a disservice with making him too much of everything. Every character has flaws and weaknesses. And I get you tired to have a Blaze who was robbed of his human element, and that would’ve been a great character flaw. If it had ever been fixed. Throughout this story, your Blaze seems to fulfill his role of being a ruthless killer through and through. The moments where he showed any shred of humanity were far and in between, and while I hate using cliche, it was too little too late. Many of your added story elements had little affect on the story because they had little affect on the characters. I found myself lost in strange plot twists, side encounters, and a love triangle I don’t think even TV Tropes has a trope for.

Despite how this all may sound, I want you to know I have much respect for you. I know first hand how much dedication it takes to write a long, complex story, which yours truly is. And to do so for as long as you did, it’s quite a feat. Your story was one of the many that drove me to write my own, and for that, I thank you. Should you like to hear more of my thoughts, please contact me. For now, I leave you with a humble adieu.

Blaze118,
I don't really know what to say right now. There's a lot of things I can say about this story, but honestly the one word that comes to my mind is confusion. I am confused with the writing, the characters, and the outcome. Let me explain myself a little bit, if you would...

The whole super soldier idea is unfortunately sub-par. It's there there so the main character can bail out of situations no problem. What's even worse about him is that he's so unrelatable, I literally had no sympathy for him whatsoever throughout the story. Honestly, I relate to characters super easy, and when I can't find anything to latch onto...it's not good.

"MUH SUPER SOLDIER GENES" Look, I get it if you want to do some clandestine stuff for the story. But literally having the main character and the gang literally be the only ones who accomplish anything of note whatsoever in the war, It lost me. I always found myself skipping over these sections because personally I didn't find them interesting. They just felt like cliched James Bond reenactments. The whole "Maverick Bond" thing doesn't really play well and I think those parts should be cut entirely. You lose nothing meaningful in doing so.

Four years. I have been keeping an eye on the story from the end of 2013 and honestly I'm super disappointed with how convoluted and muddled it got at the end. I really wanted this story to be good, but it's average at best. You can say I'm just flaming and what not, but seriously man I was rooting for you the whole way. I'm just sad and bummed it didn't deliver in a meaningful way. This story was part of the reason I got started writing on FF, so I was really unhappy to see such a decay. If you want me to discuss my reasoning further, just let me know.

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I love your story but is Antonio Castille mom and sister still alive

I love your story but is Antonio Castille mom and sister still alive.