it was awesome! really loved it! different anf beautiful! could u pleaseeeeee continue n add some more chapters to it?

The idea of a wizarding school for dramatic arts never appealed to me much, but I love what you've done here. I've seen several stories where Lily Luna or Victoire are dancers, but none of them involved on-stage magic. I found that to be really unique and my favorite aspect of this story. Lily saying no at the end is great as well - I didn't expect that. Considering the strange location, I think they felt in character and believable. So great job!

As a theatre-professional, I am excited that somehow-in the randomness of the internet-I got your story to review. I have always wondered what happened to witches and wizards after Hogwarts, and have wished to know what kind of cultural life they have. It's neat to get to see into a post-secondary school dedicated to magical performance. I particularly like the description of how Lily interweaves magic spells into her performance.

Indeed, it would be interesting to see even more about how magic makes performance in the wizard's different than the muggle's. However, for a one-chapter story, you probably have just about as much description as you could fit in-barring a few short bits about some of the students Scorpius *doesn't* like.

The strongest parts of A STORY NEVER TOLD, I think, begin when Lily walks on stage. When she began her Irish Dance and Scorpius recognized as a retelling of his accidental spell, I really sat up in my chair. I like that Scorpius thinks of her dance as "their" story (self-centered) rather than "her" story. Quite in-character with the Scorpius you created at the beginning of the fanfic.

His subsequent longing to use Lily as his muse and the fact that he felt that he should (sort of) apologize for his hex. The way he couched it in a non-apologetic way seemed *real.* Few people, and fewer guys, really know how to right out say "I'm sorry." The icing on the cake is that he follows it right up by asking her for a favor. I don't want to spoil the story for others by revealing her words, but they were perfect.

Now for the things I would criticize (I've worked as a professional editor of academic papers, so I'm a bit picky): at times, your sentences are not quite right in terms of grammar ("Grandma Greengrass had suggested he'd sit through the young dancers' auditions" vs. "Grandma Greengrass had suggested that he should sit through the young dancers' auditions"). This can work in dialogue, because it can be used to develop character. However, in narrative, it is distracting. (It is my *opinion* that) everyone should try to write as cleanly as possible, with few passive sentences as possible. If you like, I could beta this story and give you more specific suggestions (which you don't have to take).

Second, I don't quite get Grandma Greengrass's character from her dialogue. In the beginning, I thought she was *different* from most of Scorpius's family. What she said in the middle came as a surprise. In a way, I wish that I'd learned more about her attitude towards you-know-whats right at the top. It would give her more depth as a character and give Scorpius a chance to stick up for Lily (maybe just because he wants to use her).

Honestly, I think you *do* have a good set-up for a multi-chapter story. Not a massive, book-length one, but I think that you get several chapters from this relationship, tracking Scorpius's ongoing strategy and Lily's response.

Sorry if this review is massive and a bit picky. I try to be constructive, and as an editor-type, I tend to have strong opinions. :-)

Very...interesting. Keep writing

Loved it! My only criticism is that it doesn't meet my nextgen head!canon (obviously) so yeah... XD