I don't despise it if it makes you feel any better!

Firstly, when I read 'penguin boxers' I had to bite my tongue to make sure I didn't burst out laughing at 3 am. But I have to ask: How do you do it? I'm only very recently into ROTG, and to be honest I don't know everything about it. Second, when I saw that this had 44 Chapters I was all like "YAS THIS IS THE BAST DAY OF MY LIFE! A GOOD FANFIC THAT HAS MORE THAN 5 CHAPTERS!" But then I realised I am a really fast reader... man life sucks. This is a great book, and I love it, don't get me wrong, but I think there are a few things you could add, like more exaggeration of North and Bunny's accents (I could give you advice, I'm an Aussie!). But this is incredible!

WTF IS THIS ITS AMAZING. THERE'S NO CRITIQUING TO BE DONE. SOZ BUT IM ON CAPSLOCK RIGHT NOW IDK WHY

Love your story so much! You’re doing an amazing job

Such an awesome story! Really enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing :)

Just a heads up... KOALAS ARE NOT CALLED KOALA BEARS

Lovely job!

I really really like this story so far! It flows well and it’s just a great story overall I think you’re doing great!

This chapter could use some editing, I mean there's some typo, sure, but the sentences are confusing when there's no italic or double space between paragraphs.

yeeaaaa nah.

was going good until Evil jack reverted back to good ol' jack and did the cliche "end me, pls, I'm suffering too much"

Yea, I respect that wholeheartedly, buut, did it have to be when evil jack was interacting with the Guardians?

Here's my worst critique:

Ermahgerd this is like, sooooo good! I wish I could BEE like you, like, seriouslyyy, .GEE.

This was an amazing story and I loved reading it. :) I especially loved the ending with Pitchiner and his wife. That was adorable. :)

Never delete this fic

That was great, I'm so glade that Jack and his family found the villege that would be Burgress and that they were excepted there!

Let me guess, the shadow Jack reminds regular Jack of his father. And his greatest fear is to become like that horrible man. You mentioned his father left so that means Jack didn't kill him, at least he doesn't have that on his conscience. Even if it was total understandable and out of protecting his sister, I have a feeling Jack wouldn't be able to live with blood on his hands and conscience.