| Reviews for Champion |
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kimjo2 chapter 15 . 7/20 Terrific story! Thanks so much |
Matt chapter 9 . 6/22 Matches do not "swim" in water, they float! Sometimes your English is so ridiculously bad it makes me cringe. Also, someone is not "disorientated", they are disoriented. Disorientated is used as a verb. disoriented is the adjective form. |
Matt chapter 4 . 6/21 A splint is a long, thin strip of wood or other material used to hold a limb when there is a broken bone. What was in Harry's scar was a SPLINTER. A small piece of wood broken off from something larger that lodges itself in a person's body. |
Matt chapter 1 . 6/21 "that would have been a waste of money on a freak like me." As others have pointed out, the United Kingdom has a National Health Service. It would not have cost the Dursleys any money to take Harry to a doctor. Since the author of this story is German, I don't know why they wouldn't understand this concept. Perhaps they are trying to tell us that Harry does not understand it? I can't believe he wouldn't have been taught about the NHS in school, though. |
Matt chapter 1 . 6/21 "They spread terror all over the county." Really? All over the county? Which county? Why did they restrict themselves to one particular county? Why didn't everyone just move to a different county to get away from them? After all, there are many counties in England, Wales, and Northern Ireland. There used to be counties in Scotland as well, at least until 1975. Anyway, you get the idea. |
bluedogg07 chapter 7 . 6/12 Please don’t make Granger Harry’s friend. |
HarryPotterFangirl85 chapter 15 . 4/27 I enjoyed this story a lot and I am immensely sad that the sequel will more likely than not stay incomplete, due to its current age and how long it has been since its last update. |
HarryPotterFangirl85 chapter 6 . 4/26 I’m going to continue read this story only because I’m halfway through it. Don’t get me wrong, I like it a lot so far, but as a general rule I don’t start incomplete series and the sequel to this has been incomplete for several years, which is highly disappointing. |
WeisseHex chapter 15 . 4/9 Loved it! |
Ashley chapter 7 . 3/19 Great chapter but I think you've got the French translation of Voldemort wrong: "vol" can mean flight but in this instance it should be translated as "theft" and "de" is not "from" but "of". |
tricorvus chapter 13 . 3/16 I dearly love this particular chapter. Harry needed to get that said. rock on |
tricorvus chapter 7 . 3/14 Hey I just remembered: That was fantastic, where Harry's eyes improved when the horcrux was removed. Haven't seen that before. I like the moon owl. Far more original than Ice Phoenix which was a trend for a while. rock on |
tricorvus chapter 5 . 3/14 Sweet Saturnalia! This is a good story! A real page turner, if you'll pardon the expression. rock on |
Guest chapter 4 . 1/24 I don't want to jinkx this story by commenting on how very much I'm enjoying it. I've done that before...given a promising story a very favorable review during my reading and then within a few chapters Things Happen or Sirius Is Killed For No Good Reason or whatever and BAM - bye bye formerly good story. So I am not going to express how very much I am enjoying this story. ... ... ... |
vampdreams chapter 14 . 1/14 Oh this was lovely! I adored this And I like how you changed Harry's personality It's not just canon Harry, but dressed in blue You've managed to change him beyond the 'nose in book' Can't wait to read ahead |