Love this! I think they would do really well together. You captured the kindness and gentleness that they share.

Very nice, a different take on Lunas character is refreshing

Great scene.
Think you could make a great story from it :)

This a great story please upload

This was a nice little vignette showing Harry giving Luna some comfort. I'm always a sucker for scenes like this.

I will make one suggestion: your labelling of Harry's and Luna's points of view for the various sections is probably unnecessary. It was clear from the body of each section whose thoughts you were portraying, so it would be more elegant to just separate the sections with a couple of dashes or something.

But this is minor. It was a nice scene, well written, and concise. Well done.

Not bad. Honestly!