This is really sweet, I think because the angst is so bitter. You've managed to give us both points of view emotionally even though it's through Zelda's eyes. She's very understanding, and it's clear that she knows Link very well despite the bitterness laying between them. Although both have their reasons for being upset, you've managed to write the tone in such a way that I didn't 'blame' either of them really, though Zelda is convinced their issues are her fault. Somehow I couldn't be mad at her... maybe because she wanted nothing to do with her duties.

You moved through the piece with just enough detail to keep the setting interesting, yet without using too much and taking away from the dialogue. I'm envious of how you've managed to write your dialogue, it flows very smoothly for so few interspersed lines.

Well done :D

I guess the chance to be a goddess is tempting, though in this case, it means being more of a host for a goddess parasite.
Zelda actually had a double whammy, in having to subjugate her feelings for her friends and family to further the goddess's cause, but still having to live with herself as the person who had used them.
I suppose Link realized that when he came back, looking for Zelda, not a goddess.
The language is very formal. It gives a timeless quality to the story.
[longwinded tales of the fate thrusted upon them]-The past tense is still thrust.
A sweet tale of the greatest thing that a loved one can give to another-forgiveness.

There's a pain in my chest now. But that's good, right?

That was a very interesting take on what is probably, the saddest scene in Skyward Sword. It made me realize that Link had every right to be upset with Zelda, but I'm glad that in the end, he finally forgave her.

You did a great job with setting the mood in the story. It was very well-written and I didn't see any mistakes with grammar or anything. Nice job! Keep up the good work!

Awe so emotional!I felt each of their pain in this story awesome!You should make them kiss though...

Wow, that was an interesting take on this scene. I really liked it! It's understandable that Link would be angry, but I'm so glad you ended it happily. :) Great job!

What I love about this is that you’re expanding upon something in the game that should have been considered a big deal, but totally wasn’t. It was glossed over, in fact, among other things. And it’s one of those things that makes you think, come on, Nintendo :p
You’ve also shown that you completely understand the reason why a certain someone in a certain author’s story can’t seem to face another certain someone and gave him the shaft… Know what I’m gettin at? ;p
“Oh, he would still serve her. The devotion in his heart was too great to be cast aside by hurt and strife.”
So very Link.
Daw, fluffy wuffy ending. I’m liking the fluff these days. I like that you made them closer than they seem to be in the game. You just kind of get this feeling that they’re acquaintances in the game, and are sorta comfortable with each other, but aren’t bff’s or anything. I think a closer friendship makes them a more interesting pair. Yet another thing Nintendo screwed up with. Then the whole “sorry I used you” issue becomes sort of null. Link’s just kind of like, “well, I barely knew you, anyway…” *shrug*
I like that he came back. How sweet. Link’s is too kind to be mad for any longer than thirty seconds or so :D
This was great for someone with writer’s block! Keep writing. Push through it.