This was so beautifully written, a bit dark, but over all, amazing.
During certain parts of this story (Korra fighting her way through people to get to Asami, and especially the majority of the hospital scene), I was strongly reminded of the Charmed Season 3 finale, with Piper dying in Prue's arms in a hospital, her last words being "I love you", and even Piper whimpering, "Prue, I'm cold..." beforehand. Except, Prue and Piper we're sisters, haha. (Of course, this was changed in the end, but unlike this story, it was still far from a happy ending)

oh sure just rip my heart out and then shove it back in!
aka... GREAT WORK! LOVED IT!

Wow that was very intense! That would have been interesting to see if Asami or Korra could forgive him if he managed to almost kill her. But it was great.

NO. NO, IT'S FINE. IT'S COOL. I DIDN'T NEED MY HEART ANYWAY.

:)(: Oh my gosh this is such a beautiful story. I was in tears when Asami died and her words to Korra they broke my heart. Korra's agony and emotions were written amazingly. You portrayed all of that beautifully to the point where her emotions just made me cry even harder. The battle was intense and I just wanted to destroy Asami's father myself. Yay for happy endings. Excellent writing.

Wow, that was... intense.

Good job. Nice one shot.

Don't ever kill Asami again,lol. Just,no. Beautiful story though I almost stopped reading it at the death of Asami, I'm glad I didn't. lovely story

I can definitely see eyes widening if this was how the episode ended. It definitely would have been interesting

so korra shared some life force stuff? either way it's all good im glad they're happy. lovely and almost heartbreaking story. thanks for the story

sweet baby jesus, praise the lord (and you, Lanatris) asami's not dead foreal.
tears have been shed thanks to you. nice job :')

Need more

Oh my gosh, i started crying when asami died. This waa a great story. Bravo

Omg so cute and sad and perfect!*-*

Great. sweet. Awesome. amazing. Absolutely stunning job! Keep it up and good luck with you other fic with your pal! I'll be looking forward to reading it!