A bit deep but thanks for the read

This one was a little surreal. I liked the mood it creates.

It is really impressing how you always find the words that fit perfectly together and the ones that pull me right in, right there in this room- with them.
Every single word is just perfect and in the end Im always amazed how much you told me with just a few words.

Beautifully written.

very interesting pieces here! would love more!

This was pretty good! I kinda liked it. Lara ;)

Love this! Too short (that's a compliment ;)) but wonderfully dark. Would love to read more of your work.

Even in its shortness, is full of
Shades and meanings, giving us a
Perfect portrait of jane and lisbon,
Savior and saved, guilt and shame and
Regret... Powerful, indeed.

This is, I do not know how to say how bow-string taut amazing this is. It does not deserve a review, it deserves a sonnet. The ties that bind Lisbon to Jane here are cosmic strings, weaving past and future together in the now. Each segment shows that in a different way. The comments in parentheses beat their march, and the rest plays like a flute singing a dirge at dance tempo.

Lovely! I thought Lisbon's eyes were blue, but upon further examination. You're right they are green. Is this first season?

I like it :) good job :)