God I love her

Knew it

Who is King James?

I'm reading this story for the first time. This line is HILARIOUS: "I'm just the town sheriff – an authority not recognized by the people of Disneyland." Awesome story! I'm pulling up part two right now!

Loved this: "They thought it best not to tell him the real reason was that it wouldn't be right to make him watch the entire town hate his mother. There was a difference between knowing it and seeing it in action."

Loved the cereal moment! And the tickle fight! I love Maternal Regina!

Great lines for Emma in this chapter: "People are stupid" and "an authority not recognized by the people of Disneyland".

And, of course, fantastic ending!

Nicely written negotiation between Rumpel and Regina. I like your attention to detail.

Great groundwork here, and I'm so glad these two characters convinced you to write Evil Charming! ;)

This is at the heart of the matter with Regina, I think: "I deserved far worse."

Loved James's calm and logical questioning and reasoning.

Mother/daughter drinking game! Fun!

And the scene between Henry and Annie was really sweet.

The confrontation between Emma and Regina at the beginning of this chapter might be my favorite. I love Henry's concern, the detail of Emma getting them completely out of the building, the blindsiding punch, Regina connecting Graham's death to Daniel's (woah) and then throwing up. The whole scene is perfect.

And I love that Henry got mad at Emma for the regression in manner from Regina-how awesome to read him standing up for her!

Voice of reason from James-yay!

I just LOVE the Annie/Regina right before they enter the apartment. This tears at my heart exactly the way it should.

Another great Snow/Regina confrontation with a solid characterization of James. It blows my mind every time that the Charmings always try to take away Regina's one motivation for not killing them all-Henry. Anger sure does make you stupid. (Though, the neat thing about this story is that Annie dilutes the importance of Henry as a motivation for redemption-but Snow didn't know that!)

And Regina/Henry: Awwww!

Another fantastic twist!

Do you have training in creative writing? Because you seem to have a real gift for it.

Yay for the retrieval of Daniel's ring!

Great confrontation with Graham.

I love the way you give Regina unconditional love through Annie. It's just so lovely.

And I did not see the Graham twist coming. At all. That was awesome. I like how you use this scene later to demonstrate that Regina really is changing. She could have gotten away with not bringing Graham back and no one-other than Maleficent-would have been the wiser.

Heartbreaking rendition of The Stable Boy. Nicely done.