An absolutely wicked story. I loved your idea of bringing Merlin, Camelot and Excalibur into the plot as well as George’s Lance. Inspired! I have commented elsewhere on spellings etc. so I won’t bother again, except to say that they did not, in the end, affect the enjoyment of the storyline.

An apostrophe in Potters when referring to who owned the island - for shame! A plural does not just get an apostrophe for no reason, and if there was a reason then the apostrophe would usually go after the ‘s’ at the end of of the word. There is one exception, for example ‘Potter’s wand’ when talking about one person or thing. Good story though!

Whatever is a carp magnet? Has Harry taken up fishing, or do you mean crap magnet? Silly mistakes like that have no place in what is a superb story!

Great story! You did s wonderful job. Thanks for sharing!

Brilliant story thanks

Harry: excuse me Queen Elizabeth but I found King Arthur's sword in the highlands so as King of Scotland I am the rightful ruler to this country
Daphne: King Harry sounds good but King Henry is better
Harry: there hasn't been a King Henry since the Eighth so I would be the ninth King Henry
Daphne: King Henry IX let's have some heirs

so, once you're done with the bullshit fake drama, can you go back to writing a good story?
honestly, you completely broke the story flow with this meaningless, pointless, out of character and frankly just stupid "you went to have fun and ignored your responsability" hyper cliche.
First of all, Harry almost got killed not two weeks before. Nobody would deny him a chance to relax.
Second, you made Harry's have too strong a motivation to do it. it makes no sense he would drop it like that.
Considering that, it feels like you just wanted a "women are so much smarter and more responsible than men" moment without caring how out of place it was.

I know I’m late to the party, but thanks for sharing your story with us. It was an enjoyable read!

good work

04 09 2020. I have read your story for the first time and I must say that it is a truely amazing one. Thank you for the great adventure. Amazing.

This chapter is honestly something that I can see myself having written with all of the tornado stuff. Twister (which I assume was the movie referrenced) is one of all time favorite movies and I used to watch Discovery Channel's Storm Chasers, which is probably still my all time favorite TV show. TL;DR, I'm a huge tornado geek and love how you worked tornadoes into the story!

Just wondering if those “drop bears” were stealing bottles of Bundy again

I honestly think, from these snapshots, that Harry and Daphne's relationship shouldn't last. Daphne is too volatile, always assuming the worst and reacting explosively, then making up with a kiss. As a matter of fact, I am forcibly reminded of many Ginny-Bashing fics. I know this was not your intention, and I am still enjoying the story, but I call it as I see it.

I liked the irony that they both went to the pub for the same reason, to drown their sorrows in booze and managed to find each other and of course neither said what they were upset about. Perhaps that will be explained in a future chapter.

It was nice to see Harry and Daphne start to get comfortable together and start to get to know each other. Very nice that they will be having a second date. Overall, great first chapter.

I started to lmao when I read about drop bear attacks. They’re actually called koalas and rarely attack people loll