It was tooo good! Please continue!

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KEEP WRITING!

Hi! I really like the ideas for this story, and the beginning is really cool and it sounds really promising. Please keep going with this!

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Awwww

sounds interesting so far

You got me all excited and everything. I wish you would continue it. If you need help, I'll gladly assist.

Love the idea! I just have one critique. The story looks shorter than it is, and I think that's because it's in a single paragraph style. This also makes it kind of hard to see when the person speaking has changed. The story is good, but a way you can improve is by starting a new paragraph every time someone new speaks. I am not good with describing something like this so in case you don't know what I mean here is an example...
Instead of..
"...herself. "Merlin Granger. Are you okay?" George asked finally realising who he had walked into. Hermione stood up and while blushing said, "Umm... yeah. I'm fine thanks." They met each..."
Try doing..
"...herself. "Merlin Granger. Are you okay?" George asked finally realising who he had walked into.
Hermione stood up and while blushing said, "Umm... yeah. I'm fine thanks." They met each..."
If you do it the second way it makes the story seem a bit longer, and makes it easier to tell when a new person is talking.
Anyways, love the story. Can't wait to read more.

That was pretty good, I like Truth Or Dare stories, so I hope you continue. I will let you know if I get any ideas ;)

Update soon x

I really hope you write more of this story. I really enjoyed it.