This DEFINATELY needs to be developed into a full story. I like it.

Now *this* is beautiful. You should write more :)

Wow nice story! You should write more...

Awww! That was lovely. They could have given us at least a glimpse of something like this in the show, just to make the shippers happy. Damn writers who take the regs far more seriously than the actual military!

Oh it's so sweet ;)
Nice story, I enjoyed a lot !

This is well written! You captured their voices very nicely.
You should write more.
Papaya

Short but sweet. i really enjoyed it, hope to read more of your writing soon :)

Wow pretty great actually... For a normal (not your first) story... But seeing as to how it is ur first it is perfect! U have a alert and am glad us started writing here... Novel idea consicely and amazingly written D