as soon as saw her he said shit "it was at this moment he knew he fucked up" ouch i had no idea that would happen well gotta go it's 1:00 o'clock bai p.s fakemail account is fake (yes it has to have fake in the name acually just figured it out last week i started last week) fakeknucklestheshithead (idk why i did that i will resart my account account soon) thxcya

I just now had the chance to catch up with this one and thought it was perfect. The conversations were all excellent, especially the one with Jack, June, and Arcee. I am very much looking forward to the next story in this series. Gregg.

Ok first off AMAZING...Just AMAZING. Everthing went off fantasticly, it all felt real and everyone was in character.

The interaction between Jack and June was perfect! It was a wonderfull mother/son heart to heart, that felt natural and original. Nice to see June still debating her son falling inlove with alien robot. Now before I move on lets not leave out Fowler. Nice work capturing his character, lots of people make him too incompetent, too badass or compleatly one-dementional. But you captured Fowler's personality perfecly, of how he is a government man that cares about his contery and job, but also has developed a bond with the kids to some exstent and cares about them. Also it was nice to see Fowler and Optimus agree for once.

Arcee and Jack's conversation over the phone was sweet, also nice touch with the conversation about what Jack is wearing.(Arcee has such a dirty mind) Good to see Arcee and Jack talk about what happened invloving Jack faking his death, it flowed smoothly and felt like the correct emotinal reaction.

About the talk that June had with Jack and Arcee it was PERFECT...sorry but I cant really think of how to describe this in any other way. Everything flowed smoothly, the reactions felt realistic, Jack's plans for his future felt original and was a smart way for him to stay with Arcee.

Ok the part with the MECH agent, was some 007 James Bond awesomeness. Like seriously that was amazing, it had me on the edge of my seat, glued to the screen, almost shouting to the U.S. military "He's a spy! How do you not realize this? Shoot him! Shoot him before he kill's you!" it was fantastic. I can't believe that MECH agent got away! Someone PLEASE give him a medal for most badass undercover agent of all time.

MECH has Airachnid...Ok it is official I am scared. Just the thought of that causes my skin to crawl. Jack you had better be the most badass guy on the planet if you even want a chance at survival. And Arcee you keep a tight grip on your man, otherwise some evil femme might take him away.

Cant wait for the sequel! XD

So cool, can't wait to see what happens

My god...this chapter was FANTASTIC!

Great bit at the begining with the dialog, it flowed naturaly and everyone was in character. Oh Airachnid why you so evil? XD

Good idea with the signal jammer. It gave Jack something to do when Arcee was fighting Airachnid other than just watch.

Nice way to encorperate the knife into the story.

Jack faking his death was a nice touch. Great emotinal moment there with Arcee.

Wonderful fight scenes between Arcee and Airachnid. They were well done, fully fleshed out, had great detail and witty banter going back and forth.

NNNOOOOOO...WHY DID YOU KILL AIRACHNID? Sorry she is one of my favorite character's on the show, mostly becuse she is sooo deliciously evil. I know it was important to the plot and allowed Arcee to get that great dramatic moment where she took the high road, but in the end still had to kill Airachnid. THAT GOOD SIR WAS FREAKING GENIUS! But I have a question about if Airachnid will return in your other stories that you write later or is she gone for good?

Lastly nice dialog between Jack and Optimus at the end, and good chase scene with Jack and the Vehicon's.

Please update soon the suspence is killing me!

Wow...Jack's in trouble.

Loved the chapter it was amazing!

The moments between Jack and Arcee were fantastic! I loved the part where they talked about what Arcee couldent do for Jack but Jack reasured her about his feelings for her and that he doesent need something like that from her to love her.

Sooo...Jack and Airachnid I wonder how that will go down. Are you going to have Airachnid get all touchy-feely with Jack becuse she knows Arcee is Jack's girlfriend and that is will hurt Arcee emotinaly, (Jack's all like "I NEED AN ADULT!") or is Airachnid going to be violent and start cutting up Jack like in a 'B' list Horror movie? Maybe you will have Airachnid let Jack try to run away as she hunts him down like in the episode Predatory, seeing how you planted a Chekhov's gun with the whole Hunting Knife bit. I suspect you will have Jack stab Airachnid in the optic with it. Please dont have Airachnid slice up Jack, so many people do stories where Jack gets phisicaly abused and I dont want to see that happen in this story. (I am ok with a broken arm or leg and maybe some broken ribs but no more than that PLEASE!)

Anywho...Can't wait for your next update XD

PS: Question is this going to be a short three chapter story or is their going to be more?

This one intrigues me. I am looking forward to the next chapter. Great job! Gregg.