I know this is a older story, but cant help but say that i enjoyed it very much! the only things i could say about the story was the grammar could have been, and it was a little short for my taste. Other then that, i loved it! thanks for a cool story Rafchi! :D

Good Premise, but Horrible Execution. By that I mean that Snake is VERY out of character, wouldn't just go telling everyone even in another world everything, he would think that it was a trick to get him to tell his enemies Everything, its things like this and more, such as the writing Feels Forced, as well as a rather bad case of Show Don't Tell.

Where'd REX go?

That is one great story. I like to see Solid Snake re-unite with Fairy Tail again. So, will you make a sequel? The sequel will be called Metal Gear Tail 2: Welcome to Earth (my working title). In the sequel, the entire guild are somehow been transported to Earth (Snake's homeworld). The events took place 6 months or one year after the end of Metal Gear Tail. For Fairy Tail, it took place sometime around the Key of the Starry Sky arc. They will remain on Earth for weeks or months as they learn about many things from Snake's world from Snake and his friends. They will also fight Liquid Snake again or other enemies of Solid Snake. Once the guild have return to Earthland in the finale, they only have been gone for few days as time in Earthland and the Metal Gear universe are vastly different. That is what's gonna happen in your sequel. I hope there is a sequel.

just for the record, you do know that in that rail gun is a tactical nuke, right? If he fired that railgun, it would have obliterated ALL of Magnolia.

well, though i find the idea of Solid and Liquid snake being sucked into Magnolia through a strange, randomly convenient vortex, while the latter has Metal Gear REX, very entertaining, you need to work on your grammar, such as verb tenses and such. Also, it would really help us reader out alot if you were to put each new dialogue into a separate line. for example:
"(enter dialogue here)," Solid Snake said.
"(enter dialogue here)," Makarov responded.

Also, be sure to try to not make the conversations robotic. Throw some adjectives in there to give the characters emotion and personality. Also another thing is spelling. "something suctioned me up" is very...I don't know, I just feel dirty when I read that. If you need help, just let me know and I'll try to help you out.

... storyline can be good but grammer...*sigh*

If all it needed was a little polishing off I wouldn't have made fuss, but why would Snake immediately put himself in a situation combat situation against an unknown foe? After witnessing all these strange people are capable of, he should not feel the need to intervene. In addition, why would he automatically judge one side to be "bad" or "good?" Snake didn't come from a comic book universe like Superman, where the badly dressed guy with an evil face is automatically the villain. Why wouldn't he worry about Otacon and Meryl? Why wouldn't he worry about Liquid (Who should still die, due to Fox Die)?

As for your grammar...it's only bearable if your storyline is good.

Lol, I love that box!

Like the idea. Needs to be a little longer and more polished.