I don't know if you've been slowly working your way through the chapters and fixing things, or if you got lazy as the chapters progressed, but the quality of your writing gets a little worse in each chapter with your first being the best I've read from you. I'm almost unwilling to try reading the fourth after the number of mistakes in this one.

Ok story

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I've read some angsty pro-Voldemort fics but this is the first one that I'm actually kinda rooting for him

A common fannon is that the ministry or Hogwarts gives special dispensation to olivander for hogwarts new student. They pay for much of it allowing the students to have a wand in order to be educated in order to join the workforce as productive witches and wizards. It also could play into things like the trace. Given how important wands are for the wizarding world, and the lack of other wand makers nearby, I feel safe concluding that olivander works for the ministry. At least partially.

A/N: I'll let it to your imagination where Harry put his tail to :D

Her nose :D

Okay, I just read the whole thing at once. It was... very good.
Someone mentioned it already that you miss the word 'the' a lot, but it's the only mistake I could catch.
The story was actually very interesting and original, though I would've enjoyed it more if I hadn't expected a Harry/Hermione pairing. He becomes irrelevant at some point.
I am saddened to see it unfinished, but I understand. Hope you did finish your original works

Very, very good.

You probably shouldn't try to start a story if you're too stupid to finish. Good riddance with bad trash.

This is awful. Good God.

what is it with you and the word "The" !? you never put it before names, it sonds so dumb when Sirius says that he didnt betray Potters. It should be that he didnt betray the Potters. And its such a constant mistake that i find it crazy that you never realized it. Other that that its quite a interesting story, never read a premise like Harry living as a Snake so thats refreshing. But so far i dont like Hermione being a black, i think it changes the character too much and with Harry being nowhere near canon Harry its sad that you change both characters so dramatically.

nope, still nonsense. good story to chapter 20, but why did you take it down the shitter hole?

what the fuck is this nonsense

When I was reading the authors note I laughed my ass off its the first time I've ever seen someone so anal about the money system to actually do something about it.

WHAT?! I’ve been reading obsessively all day and your ending it? Please don’t do this to me.