I have to say I love Aala and Obi-Wan's relationship. How he knows her so well and how they communicate with each other. He listens carefully and offers encouragement when it is needed. And the glimpse into the relationship with his daughter is utterly charming.

Funny to read this story again.. now that I have a 7 year old torpedo of my own!.

Amazing how you seem to capture family life so well. Heart versus mind, always wanting what's best for a child even though you don;t have a clue what to do sometimes.

Love how you've written Obu is a loving father figure. so sad they have to keep it a secret.

I like how Obi’s trying to give Aala space - very sweet of him - until that fateful, dripping wet and naked scene [grins] Good to know she’s not dead yet ;)

It struck me as a very male thing to do; show the love of your life how much you missed her by her effect on you physically. It’s great to see the male side of Kenobi.

Favourite lines are this lovely bit of fanservice…

“Rivulets of water were running down his arms and his chest, over the edges of muscle, across his abdomen and down his legs to drip on the floor beneath him.” – Yummy!

… and this one about his cheekiness :)

“So if he spent a bit longer than normal with his arms raised and the towel over his head to afford her an unimpeded view...”

The descriptions of Kamino at the start were wonderful; very fitting and accurately described. Loved the descriptions of the raging, roiling storms, and of Obi-Wan's weariness and 'grey-ness'. "Each time he came here he couldn't help but prepare himself for bad news" - I loved that line, really shows how no matter what, Kamino isn't really a place where happy things happen. It was a good contrast to what actually happens to Obi. :)

I love how, when he realises he's about to be a father, his mind turns to the most mundane of thoughts; "He was in a one-person fighter for star's sake". All the little things, the practicalities, that completely disappear when he has his baby girl in front of him, and I loved how his emotion is so raw and real. :) I also liked the warmer, more friendly feel to the Kaminoans; I'm used to reading about them as cold and unfeeling, and I think had you also written them like that it would have detracted from the scene somewhat. It's as though little Mira can melt even a Kaminoan's heart. :)

I loved this: "she was in his arms, small and warm, perfect and squirmy and nothing else existed", really cute! The descriptions of Mira were absolutely adorable, and I love her! Another favourite line was "the scene was repeated but complete" - I can't say why, but that really gave me a sense of family and I think it was a good way to say Aala was there.

Overall, I liked it a lot! Very, very good work, very emotionally charged, and well written. Happy birthday, as well! I enjoyed. :)

Hmm. Interesting. Can't wait until things pick up. What role will Mira have in the Alliance, I wonder...

I know it's taken me a while to look at this, but oh well. :p

Just love the connection between Aala and Obi-Wan. It's always tangible, but is particularly evident in this chapter. It's a credit to your storytelling abilities and the strength of the characters that you write that they manage to come together in this beautiful way. This moment could have been filled with angst, bitterness and drama, but instead it's an affirmation of how much they care for one another.

Obi-Wan knows that Aala needs time; he knows that she needs time to "come back" to him, and he gives it to her. :) It's wonderful how you portray this, even from the opening line - "He missed her, so much."

This moment is about them finding their way back to one another after a long absence and a mutual, bad situation, and the fact that they do so without needless drama shows how strong they are, and how strong their relationship is.

Love seeing Obi-Wan as a daddy - Obi-daddy! :D - and any scene with him and little Mir is just too wonderful. :) Sigh. He loves that little girl, so much. [hearts]

Ah, and a shower moment as well. You spoil us! ;) I love how he recognizes that Aala finds him so attractive - how could she not? :P - and he takes a moment to indulge her gaze. Really lovely how he just wants to give her everything he can, how he wants to *show* her how much he loves her, how much he cares for her, and how much he has missed her.

Sigh. :D

"Miracle" always makes me happy to read. :) I love this world and the family that you've created. :D Always, always looking forward to more! :D

Oh those are quite the visuals, aren't they? Obi-Wan, all wet and towel-y...

Such a simple chapter, but truly lovely - I love how you have these snippets of peace amid everything going on in the greater galaxy, a little bit of homeyness warding off the dark...they just sort of rotate around each other, getting a little closer...and who can blame Aala for having eyes?

Wonderful work, as always!

As promised, late but not forgotten, I assure you :)

The atmosphere of this piece just gets me every time. It reminds me of AotC when Obi-Wan lands on Kamino for the first time. The mirror here is unmistakable. His arrival on Kamino facing a crisis - while this one is more personal than the last, the emotional turmoil within them can’t have differed all that much. The fact that the weather reflects his mood and his feelings is fantastic. There’s a sense of uncertainty to him, that you write so well, coupled with the anticipation and longing make for a very angsty Obi-Wan scene.

Their character voices are just fantastically clear; I can ‘hear’ them speaking when I read this piece and it’s so very fitting. Easy to picture, almost like watching a mini movie in my head.

Taun We’s care with Kenobi’s feelings is heartwarming if a little awkward; as a Kaminoian should be ;) She’s obviously trying to use language and terms as appropriate to his species and sensibilities but is too much of a scientist to really feel comfortable with it. Very accurate to character :D

Obi-Wan’s trepidation as he realizes just what he’s arrived in time for is so adorable to read. The nerves, the shock, the dazzle factor of being where he needs to be in those moments thanks to some kind of warning from the Force are all just fantastic. He’d guided by a power that places him in the time and place that he’s of use most - or that is of use to him most.

Your description of the Kaminoian cloning jar and having her extracted were very well done. A visual reinforcement that this is business as usual for them while, all the while, poor Obi-Wan is struggling to hold on to his composure.

The emotion you pack into this piece is humbling. You’ve created a bubble of emotional *realness* that just screams about experience and, in doing so, you not only draw the reader into that bubble but you help us understand what Obi-Wan is feeling. His triumph and modesty; the humbled feeling of being responsible for the creation of a new life; the anticipation in holding and touching her for the first time.

I think it’s adorable that he’s able to hold Miracle, that Taun We has been sensitive enough to his reaction to pick up on his desire and brings him Mira. So, -so- cute the first father/daughter moment. His wonderment at having a daughter is just… it hits right in the heart. He’s so enthralled with his daughter, so caught up in the miracle that she is as she never should have been, it’s fantastic to see.

I -love- that he can’t wait to share Mira with her mother… and we all know how that plays out ;)

Great little ‘epilogue’ at the end there with Obi-Wan and Aala *grin* So cute, so perfect – a great way to tie the pieces together!

Arguably your best work, girl. Be proud; a very powerful piece!

Wow what an amazing chapter, you did an awesome job. Great job on capturing Obi-Wans emotions.

this is so ( crying like a baby ) BEAUTIFUL MY FEELS OH THIS IS AMAZING i loved every bit of it and it's so beautifu oh.

I had such fun reading this, Serendipity. Amazingly written and the emotions are just so lovely, I got wrapped up in them and felt so happy that Aala and Obi got hitched. The whole chapter was just so lovely and sweet. Great job!

“Too easily, they could rush through this moment, let it pass in a blur of passion, but more than ever she wanted it to last.” – I loved this sentiment.

I love how they lingered just touching each other for long moments. Yay! No scratchy Obi beard! Take advantage Aala!

And their first night together, her answer to Obi’s question, and his reaction… so romantic!

“The combination of Obi-Wan's passion and ardor, his love for her and his desire to please her, along with the fact that he was her husband had threatened to completely overwhelm her.” – Just beautiful.

The playful morning after conversation was just amazing. :D

I really loved seeing Aala and Obi get to spend some time together. They are so in love and wrapped up in each other, but I so enjoyed seeing them so happy together.

I really enjoyed the conversation between Aala and Sola. It felt like a real conversation, something that might’ve legitimately happened. The characters and the scene just seemed to pop out from the page. I can’t pick out something in particular to show you because the whole scene is just flawlessly real :)

"What what?" she countered. – this line made me giggle.

Wahey! Aala said yes! And the wedding ceremony... :D

Lovely chapter. Really gorgeous and well written.

The cliffhanger in the last chapter was cruel. That’s all I’m going to say.

Yay for Obi being so understanding and patient. Still… [facepalm]

“Obi-Wan gave her what he thought was his best sexy grin” – This line made me grin. He’s sexy and he knows it! XD

His persistence was so charming and gorgeous. I loved watching him trying to playfully win Aala over. This whole chapter was so lovely and fluffy. I really enjoyed it.

First up, I love this song :D

It was so lovely how Obi unintentionally tried to help Mir with the Force. You described the scene and Mir so well that I found myself getting that goofy grin that I seem to do around toddlers.

Obi’s desire to show Aala how much he loves her was adorable. She is a lucky, lucky woman.

Great to see the lifeday party went smoothly.

A lightsaber-crystal nightlight. Awesome, but what if someone recognises it for what it is? [frets]

“as if he had asked her to lift a star ship from a swamp.” Nice call forward :D

:O Obi proposed! To quote laloga, squee! I couldn’t help it though, I chuckled when I saw “Mr and Mrs Kenobi”, it just seems so domestic, so wrong! :)

No?! What!

Woah. It was a bit of shock seeing such a long chapter after chapter 2 was so short.

“She'd obviously been very upset, that was clear in the Force when he'd come upon her in the hallway. But he'd made a decision... to go to Acherin instead of coming to Naboo. And he could not change it, he could only hope she would forgive him in time.” Sounds like Obi is having trouble balancing being a Jedi and being a father and partner. Poor guy. There’s no easy solution here :/

Love how Mir and Obi have the same eyes. “Two pairs of blue eyes that were the same color met and held; she stared, gazing at him with wide-eyes.” So cute!

“He felt huge waves of relief that Aala had been doing so well. It did not escape him that he had virtually dropped a newborn into her lap and then left after only a few weeks.” With this in mind, it was great to meet Sora. It’s nice to know that Aala has had a helping hand seeing as Obi couldn’t be there.

Oh boy [shakes head] Obi’s good intention to get some couple time backfired somewhat. Poor Aala! Crappy night, then she wakes up and finds Mir gone.

I like the way you are portraying Aala and Obi’s relationship, and all the bumps that come with settling into a relationship and parenthood. It make it that much more realistic and incidentally reveals so much more about the characters. I really enjoyed watching the two of them together. The quiet scene in bed where Obi comes clean struck me as so realistic, just two people snuggled together trying to work things out.

"It's totally your turn," she mumbled into her pillow. "For the next month." – love this line!

This was a great chapter that really showed off the dynamic of Obi/Aala and just set up the background info (Ferus, Malorum, Obi dashing off to save the day) very well. Well done!