This progresses nicely, and really gets to the heart of who each of them are and what draws them together.

Cheesy but so good! :)
Crystal

that was amazing. the parallel point of view was fantastic, an this story is heartBreaking really. well done.

This was real good. I felt her pain. It made me cry. Will you continue?

Wow, this was intense... and I truly loved it! :)

I love the symmetry here. This was such a good piece. Very well done!

That was beautiful.

I just wanted to say that I think you are a very talented writer!