This is beautiful. We don’t really see that much of Lily or James in canon, but I love your interpretation of their characters here, especially Lily. 3

I love this so much thank you. The way you write the characters is so good and i can't

This is beautiful. I never really paid all that much attention to James and Lily, but this is wonderful. You continue to blow me away.

Excellent explanation for the whole Patronus thing.

This is just heartbreaking. And so well written, of course. I love the talk about Lily's and James's patronuses.

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Your Lily is just perfect. I like what you explained about the Patronus and the kangaroo thing. The relationship between James and Lily is sweet and lovely, and your James is my James. This is when Lily realized that James has always cared for her and that he was not lying when he said he was infatuated with her. I mean, truly infatuated. However, there are some things I would like to point out about your story: Narcissa was not in Hogwarts when the Mauraders were, and I don't know why you wrote the whole story in cursive letters. There is a part a bit confusing, when Lily is in the kitchen, is she talking to James? I thought so, but then James says "I gave up on my brother when he needed me most" and I changed to Sirius because James is an only child, but it doesn't make any sense.

Above all, this story is gorgeous. You can feel all the emotions and the battling of Lily, trying to fit into a world that rejects her. She was really brave and strong.

Keep writing.

Oh . . . this is wonderful. I was totally absorbed while reading it. Love the emotions you've got going in this piece. You made great use of repetition throughout it; there's only one repetition that I don't think works so well:

She knows what he's going to say, which is why she prompted it. "But you're one of us," he says, reading from the script he sees in her face. "You don't have to do it on your own."

It seems unrealistic to me because it's a character saying the same thing twice rather than repetition within your own prose. Perhaps you can have him say it in slightly different words, or have him say "Like I said" first or something along those lines?

Other than that bit, all the repetition was beautifully executed and I loved it. I very much enjoyed this piece. Really nice work!

That was so sweet! I almost cried! I love that you made James and Lily's relationship so deep and tentative and sweet and touching!

Positively gorgeous. Is there going to be more? :D

Oh sweet Merlin... that was amazing, as all your stories are. I loved all the metaphors, and the excellent characterization, and FINALLY a James and a Lily that are completely believable and accurate! Please, please, please write more stories about this pairing!

though honestly, I don't care what characters your HP stories are about, even if I originally hated the character you always find a way to make me love them and cry my eyes out about them xD

Oh, I loved it!

Perfect characterisation, so very believable, loved the stag and doe metaphor that you used, and the overall style and theme. I just love how you portrayed their relationship.

An amazing read!

This is really wonderfully written. Your Lily is brilliant, and her grief written very convincingly. In particular, I loved that her patronus beeing a kangaroo, and the conversation about that. I also liked that it was James who doubted it had been Snape's fault; when contrasted with his previous bullying it really shows the growing maturity. The metaphor of his ireading over letters with stones in his eyes/i was an especially lovely one.

Amazing. Had that heavy- hitting depressing tone (without going over the top) that kind of makes my chest ache with the watery smile at the end that i seem to crave. Really, this was beautiful. Plus, it was neat seeing a bit of the transition that James and Lily's relationship had. Haven't seen too much of it that was written this well:)

This was beautiful! I loved how you set the whole thing up, especially the part where Sirius and co pretend that it's just another day.