pretty good

you had a lot of extra letters in some words, but other than that i like the plot so far.

*Bemused* An one-year old riding on a broom?!...

coot ,anonymous...please

bridal, laid,craled

enemies. believe. lustful. plz edit. many other foolish mistakes...

scandalous spellings ! plz correct...

Great story! You had a great idea and turned it into a great fanfic!

loved the story but i really think you should add an epilogue at the end or maybe make a sequal about Leo and their other children.

AWww, I'm so sad thats it's over! You did a wonderful job with this story and I hope the next one you write will be just as good! Also, don't worry too much about your English, in reality there's only a couple of this that would need to be fixed, but everybody makes mistakes! Keep writing because you're really quite talent, wonderfly amazing story! :)

Ugh...I realli don't know how to word this...,,thank you for your amazin story. Was that right- ah whatever I looved your story it was increadable. I loved the plot it Alessandro so unique and everything was well written...thank you? Do I say thank you...idk so Thank you!

thank you,and it was amazing. You also just gaind a bit of my tiny fragile ego,so thanks. Again,i love it and cant wait to see what you write next. :) :D

Omg! So intense. How many chapters are left ...:( o no its gonna be over soon

it was akward,but it should good.

Omg! Your story is so increadable you like need to update