GOOD STORY TACOS

I love this story! You are an amazing author!

Mossy

The ending is very sad but the story is great.

Hey.
Hate to say this but your story contains non-story content which is not allowed by fanfiction according to the rules and guidelines you formally agreed to.

Please either delete this chapter of place some story content in here. Author's notes can also be put on your profile.

Regards
-Cloudwhisker
Member of LCCG

P.s Chapter 7 is also a violation.

DON'T CHANGE THE TITLE! None of this sucks. You're doing a good job. Good luck!
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So yeah, hi :) you should update soon

Dragon

Sounds cool! Tell us when the new one is up!

awwwwwww... it was just getting interesting!

That's a turn. Innocent and ignorant Day coming up. She's been given the easiness of a kitty pet life, so I can't blame her for being ignorant of the life of a rogue. I hope Luwin is okay. Though, with the way things are going I kinda know I'd be putting my hopes up. That brings me to my next topic. It just might be me, but as the reader, I feel like Stray is feeling a bit too sorry for herself. Like what day said in the beginning of the chapter:

"And for the first time in my life, I was fighting for someone else and not myself"

It seems a tad too melodramatic. It's not just this, but it's also little other things that she has said, thought, or narrated that seem a little too melodramatic for a real character. Yes, the life of a Rogue and a Stray is harsh, but wouldn't that hard life toughen her and make her not feel as sorry for herself?

That...was defiantly interesting. It went kinda fast, but I'm definitely looking forward to this battle.

So, Stray is female. A very depressed female. I see you're going slow with this. It has it's pros and cons. I can't wait to see what your plot is...or if it's one of those pleasant life narratives. Well, pleasant wouldn't be the word I'd use for Stray here, but I digress. You're doing well! Onto the next chapter!

A wonderful prologue. It's short, but it really hooked me in. This looks really interesting. Something akin to a great adventure. For some reason, I find Stray to be an exciting name for a cat. I'll definitely be reading. I'm expecting big things from this.

Nice story. :3 but I have to tell you why I'm reading it. For school I need to write a fairly long story, and I already know what it'll be about. A former kittypet, named Socks, who is forced to join a BloodClan-like group of rouges. The only way she thinks she can be successful is if she befriends the dangerously insane leader and kills innocent cats to establish leadership and fear. This (what you're writing) seems somewhat similar and since you're doing a pretty good job of telling a dark story, as mine will be, I would like opinions and advice on how to make it exciting/non-mary-sue-ish/thought-provoking/interesting. Your help would be greatly appreciated!

~Juniperleaf

PS. I do love your story ;)

OOOOOO!

O.O oh boy... some serious shits about to go down. update! i must know!

~Dragon