Wow, Jill, this is brilliant! I'm really stunned by how much you managed to tell with so few words - and the depth of it is amazing.

I have to admit I had to read it twice before I could understand what parts were going together and how the ending was already given away in the beginning (hmm, if that makes sense) but really, this is so good. It's like pieces of a puzzle, all those small snippets, and the shortness, abruptness even, really adds something to this story.

And better up - I'm so inspired right now, just aksjdlaj, fantastic Jill. Absolutely fantastic.

Oh, terrific, I love it! Very well-written, fantastic.

This was so sad :'( poor Molly, all she wanted was her fairytale ending...

Ooh, tension ;) I'm being so annoying but whatever, I want to share how amazing I find these. I can never decide between TeddyLily and TeddyVictoire, so good job Tatoe :D

Wow. OK this was amazing, so amazing. I loved the repeating "on a mission, will not be distracted" bit, and also the little bits in between in bold.

NGFs are all so talented!

This was so beautiful! Oh my goodness, I can't even. The line "(Says the living, breathing, Romeo and Juliet paradox)" made me laugh, that was just what I was thinking throughout the whole thing.

But yeah. This was pretty much perfect. Brb off to read the rest of the chapters :)

Aww, this was really cute, Bunny! LucyLorcan is a wonderful pairing, and you wrote it well. There were a few spelling/grammar mistakes in this, but it was still a great read. Great job!

oh, wow, just wow. all i ever read these days is fucked up Teddy/Lily and well, this is why, because it's always amazingly well written and angsty and just wow. this is brilliant, aimy, i loved mags and i loved lily and teddy and i hated tom. the whole storyline was brill and mag's repetition of "tom's coming today"

all of it was descriptive and beautiful and well-worded. amazing work. :3

always,
summer

I just saw this and I think I died from the general flawlessness of this. Several times.

It reminded my why I will go down with this ship. Hdjkjdka it's adorable and their relationship is just amazing. I loved the beginning- you made me want to read it and then the end was just as amazing, if not better!

The little details you put in just make the story. OHMYCHEESE they just make me squeal, okay.

I don't think this could be any better. It's absolute perfection!

THIS IS SO BEAUTIFUL, I JUST CAN'T.

I loved Lysander and I felt so sorry for him. I loved the angst and all the short sentences and song lyrics before every part. And I adored Lorcan and LILY IS REALLY A BITCH FOR LEAVING LYSANDER, OKAY?

But she came back and I adore happy endings, so.

asadsdfsgdjk this is so so so good that i can't think of anything else to say. I know this review is all crap, but it's your fault because you blew me away with this that I can't even.

absolutely asdfghjk flawless! and always keep writing!

omg Ellie this was so good! I loved every bit of it, ngl.

The AU was so perfect, and you made the characters fit perfectly into the story. I don't know how you did it, but they all seemed so natural in this universe. You know what I mean? Like they belonged here. I don't actually prefer AUs, but this just blew me away...

The characterizations were good. You made me love every one of them. I liked how all of them were somehow connected with each other, and how their stories were interconnected, y'know?

And ALBUS/SCORPIUS! Uggghhh, I actually love Albus more than Scorpius in this, which has never happened before, haha. But he's so arrogant and sexy and hot and ugh...;)

I feel sorry for Victoire and also Lysander. But was that a hint of Roxander there? Because if it was I'll love you forever. :P

And lastly, you writing was fabulous! It was a brilliant start, and I really want to know what happens next. So, I'll be looking forward to reading more of this, okay? :D

Great job!

This was fantastic! I love your characterizations of everybody - not just Lucy and Lysander, but all the background characters as well. Rose, Scorpius, Dominique, Lorcan, Lily, Roxanne, Molly, Fred...they were all fabulous. It's very well-written, too, and I didn't notice any spelling or grammar mistakes. I love how you've finished it, too. It's kind of open-ended, but also definite in a way - like we know that Lysander's gone after Lucy, but not where or how he finds her or whatever, and I really liked it. There were some pretty amusing lines in there, also, and I love the interactions between everybody. The dialogue was very realistic, also, and I could picture them saying those things. Overall, you did a really nice job on this!

This was amazing! I don't like Teddy/Victoire as a pairing, but I really love how you've written them here. I've never ever seen Victoire characterized this way before, but I absolutely love it - it's refreshing and unique and extremely creative. You've characterized Teddy very well also - his portrayal is a bit more common, but he's rather similar to my version of him and I loved that as well. Mystery stories are awesome, but it seems to be very hard to find good ones on fanfiction, and this one is definitely one of those good ones. It kept my interest throughout the whole thing, and I love how you also inserted random other moments from before Hogwarts or Vic's first year and things like that. This was a perfect blend of mystery and romance and drama, and you've done a wonderful job on it!

I loved this. Despite the fact I don't ship Lily/Lysander in the least bit, I loved this. It was very well-written, first of all; the only mistake I noted was stumble instead of stubble, and that's really minor. I also love how it progresses, starting from six years ago and then gradually moving on into the present day. I love your characterizations of Lily, Lysander, and Lorcan, and the family relationship between Lysander and Lorcan is written very well, also. I like that Lily named her son Loki - that's the Norse god of mischief or something like that, right? - and it definitely fits for the son of Lily Luna Potter. The lyrics that you put in front of each section really helped set the tone of it as well, and overall, this was really great!

Oh my gosh. Just... wow.

Jill, this was absolutely and utterly fantastic and I loved it and just thank you so much! I adored the set up of this fic - I had honestly no idea what was going on until halfway through, and I just really, really wanted to find out what was going through Dominique's head to make her think this way. And really, one of the best things about this fic is that you don't answer all my questions. There's so much potential for the expansion of this universe and all of the things that lead up to the final moment, it's amazing, and it's the kind of stuff that fanfiction itself lives off, filling in the unanswered questions.

Okay, so: characterisation. Your Dominique was completely unlike any version I have ever written, and rarely read, and the great thing is that it totally comes through in your writing. One of the lines is something like "Why wasn't she a Slytherin?", and after reading it, the audience knows the answer. Her devotion to Victoire is so strong, her loyalty so clear that it is impossible for her to be anything but a Hufflepuff. She takes her sister's death so much to heart (not that you wouldn't, I mean seriously) that she kills herself over it - you don't get much more devoted than that.

Which leads me to the last line. Oh goodness, the last line. It's just utterly, utterly perfect, and I have no words. Thank you so much, darling