You deserve a better review then I’m going to write, but it’s good. I like the older characters, what you’ve done with the Kyuubi, the more mature version of the Naruto world, the skipping of participating in the Chunin exams. I don’t like how shallowly Naruto started dating Hinata. I look forward to reading more.

cool

Man people always stop toward the chunin exams no creativity smh

Lost interest when it was mentioned there wasn't an update for 6 years

I know this chapter was out in 2012 or something, but as you updated this January 2019, I'll assume you still read your reviews.

I read your A/N and went to look at the anonymous review you speak about. I do not know if you rewrote parts of the story since this review (2012) but I thought I would address some of its points (because I like what you do).

First, I'll admit I was afraid of the "assassin chunin" at the opening of the story. I think you did a good enough job dealing with the trope, actually having hardass ninjas keeping Naruto safe, and ANBU coming in quickly. So, yeah, the trope is used to the bones but at least the way you handled it was logical.
The second point would be closer to the truth... If they weren't all 16 y.o. And you wrote the three as accepting of the risks of barfing. It would have been interesting having Kakashi running them so hard they indeed ended vomiting but well...

The third point is a bit more complicated. While I disagree with Anonymous that you "underwrote" Sasuke and Sakura to make Naruto shines more, I'd say that their personality is a bit "foggy". In canon, 12 y.o Sasuke is obsessed with vengeance and it chills the other two to the bone. He also does not joke. Basic personality defining traits, but efficient ones. Here, he is way, way, way more relaxed. But the result for me is that I don't really know where Sasuke begins nor where he ends. It weirds me out when he cracks a joke, yet the way you wrote him, it's not unbelievable.

Problem? Yes and no. I mean, in real life, people are never perfectly defined. But it's a story. Can you allow yourself to write a character like that? That's for you to decide, but it ties into a deeper problem. In canon, they each have a clear, defining goal, the anchor for their whole personality. Becoming Hokage, killing Itachi, marrying Sasuke. Here, they do not. Even Naruto does not really know what he want to do with himself. Doing ninja things? I mean, he wants to be "a powerful ninja to protect his friends". But that's where he should end up at the very last part of the story, right? How will you make him evolve? Sasuke does not seem half as convinced he wants to kill Itachi as in the original. Sakura... I'm drawing a blank here. Where is she right now? I am of the mind that MCs of a story need a clearly defined goal (preferably one that sounds cool) at the beginning of the story. Be it personal or not (I mean, in LotR i.e, the goal is to destroy the One Ring. Clear, simple, sounds cool.)

If you don't have a handy McGuffin to destroy, well, you need your characters to be the driving force behind the plot, and as such, they need something large to aim at. Not that it cannot evolve, change, morph radically of course. You are free as well to have periods of uncertainty, but don't drag them too long, especially when it is your characters who drive the plot forward (and not the opposite).

I will agree to two points raised by this old ass anonymous review. First, Naruto having the hots for Hinata. When? How? Why? What? Anon is right here. Second, it is true that Naruto seems to have way more influence on his two teammates than they have on him.

Best writing to you, and do continue. It's a very enjoyable, very well written read.

what kind of crazy author uses an interrobang as punctuation?!

Copy pasta made me laugh!

I suggest stop putting "no" if you are writing a jutsu in english. so instead of Great Fireball no Jutsu, Just Great Fireball Jutsu sounds much better. Of course if its in Japanese then "no" is important

Good chapter albeit short compared to the previous one. Keep It up.

I like how you portray the characters (Especially Kyuubi) but that chapter was too long even if it was a very important topic and relates to the whole realistic world problems.

Good chapter though

I binged read this entire fic and was saving my review for last chapter but what I saw made me change my mind. IT'S JIRAYA! NOT JIRIYA?!

apologies. I will review your fic after reading the Last 2 chapters. You're too g great btw

I just started reading this story for the first time and I absolutely love it! This story all the elements that weave a great tale, action, adventure, romance, and the constant threat of pointy thingies being hurled at you. I would love some more NaruHina moments, but that's just me. I love your writing style and simply can't wait for more.

I've read through the whole thing, and I definitely understand the issues with writing fanfiction while now in the real world. It's something I've had to deal with for quite a while. But your fic is actually competently done and very intriguing. You do have some issues with pacing at times, but overall it's very good.

glad to read more!

I've really enjoyed your portrayal of Jiraiya. Welcome back to the land of fanfic writing.