I really liked it! Unique and one of a kind

Omg! So kawaii, hot and steamy! Ciel grew up fast! I just wondered when Claude went when Alois was attacked... But then... It's so good!

I don't know, this all seems "Stanger Danger-y" to me.

What happened to Claude?

That's an extremely interesting plot you have there! I'll definitely read it if you choose to turn this into a multi-chaptered fanfiction instead of a two-shot..

I liked it wish it was longer

I play pokemon (although sadly I don't have any new ones but I know enough I guess) and I think that would be cute and suits because Sebastian is all dark and Ciel is kind of like him so it fits that he would be in the same pokemon family as him or at least in a pokemon family that's close or related to his so i'd say you did good:D I love the story,and hope you update fellow pokemon gamer!

I think you did a wonderful job on the lemon! Its deffinetly not the worst one ive read. YES! A little Espeon Ciel and Umbreon Sebastian would be AWESOME! I totally have to do that now... Then Undertaker deffinetly has to be a ghost type... Bard would have to be a fire type. Lizzy could be a Eevee. or Maybe the cat Pokemon from Hoenn... I dunno. But yeah! Hehehehe XD XD ALOIS IS DEAD! HAhahhaha take that ******! Hhahhahaha! Dude was awful and deserved to die a fiction and fiery death!

c'mon, dont be so hard with yourself! I sure have alot of experience with lemons. And there have been many lemons, that were much worse than yours!

so cheer up!

also, I want to compliment you on your story. I mean the whole thing.
Though it was a rather ... uhm... in german it is 'fragwürdig' you can translate it
i'll try to describe it...
it's questionable (?)

but also innocent and sweet. i don't know, i apologize for this mess of english language.
i'm german, so sorry...

let's just say: this story was wonderful, really wonderful!

Well, you certainly did a good job explaining every part of Ciel's contract. I also happened to notice that the outfit that Sebastian had him wear is what he normally wears in the anime. Pretty slick there, pal.

please tell me this isn't finshed! i really feel theres more drama to this! please please i really want this to continue!

I really lOved everything about this; the plot, the style, the characters (who btw All seemed perfectly in character) and of course the lemon. In fact, the only real criticism I have is that it feels like you wasted the story by ending it too quickly. It culminated in sex instead of in more plot and it seems like you could do all manner of interesting things with it. It would be interesting to see ciel and Sebastian visit Ciel's parents, more characters introduced, more crossdressing, etc. Isn't ciel cute when he's being a chick? Lol. That reminds me, I liked the moment where Sebastian was like "oh noes! That would make me gay...wait. I'm a demon. It doesn't matter." and also I felt like the crossdressing was well played. It get awkward unless ciel vehemently protests every step of the way. Anyways, please consider re-opening this and writing more. I'll put it on update just in case. Thanks!

Love,

Chana

Love the story, and it was nicely written. And I think the Espeon-Ciel and Umbreon-Sebastian would be awesome! I think I'll try that one of these days, just for kicks and giggles.

glad alois was killed!but it was so sweet at the end a lovely lemon

I liked it. Can we have more?