Nice fanfic!

Thanks for writing and have a nice day!

This is a fantastic fic - wonderfully written and something that can easily fit into the movie's plot as a missing scene. Hiccup's reaction to being caught and Fishleg's noticing that it was a saddle were both bang on in terms of keeping the characters in-character, all of which were. I loved this. :)

I really like the way this story is written. Keeps a bit of mystery as the audience isn't entirely sure what's going on at first but you really start to get it after a bit. I kind of like stories like that. This is really good, I can't really think of anything that could be improved.

Good oneshot.

Well this is a belated review, haha. This was so good! You are a truly gifted writer. Thank you so much for sharing, I really enjoyed reading! :)

great one-shot. I always like to look for stories which explore the moments between what was in the movie. This was a very nice look at some of the scenes which could have happened- and your writing expressed Hiccup's feelings really well.

Cheers, T.

This is really well done. I like the way you've split the theme of redemption into two parts; risk and reward.

As a sneaky, mischievous kid myself (in the far distant past), I know the feeling of being caught flat-footed at something I wanted kept secret. I remember stammering the same way Hiccup did, thinking furiously of excuses that would sound good, weighing each idea in a heartbeat. You got that feeling of spiky, adrenaline filled panic across perfectly. And since the reader knows what his secret is and that it leads to Hiccup's attempt at redeeming himself to Toothless, it makes us want him to pull off the deception all the more.

Then the reward. I like the way you start with the implication of Toothless' thoughts about Hiccup (I assume.) "I will wait for you." That's a powerful statement, all the more meaningful when we know the dragon can't speak directly but will still make himself understood. I expect Toothless made his feelings clear to his Viking companion one way or another. And the second line, "I trust you" just puts a big, wistful grin on my face.

Nice work with the details on tanning, as well. I've been given to understand that tanning leather is particularly smelly work, and I can sympathize with Fishlegs in having to work on a large project like the saddle.

Good job. I look forward to your next submission.

Hah! I posted mine, too! Good to see you hav this here. Erm, I assume you already saw my comments, but I'll add more beyond what the form asked for:

I do like the thoughtful descriptions here. There's a lot of attention to detail and the strong focus on Hiccup's purpose here. I daresay it might be a little more effective to make it a little more subtle, but the idea is wonderful.

I love the conversation between Hiccup and Gobber... it suits their relationship.

I didn't realize you wrote one of the "SaS" stories. I was so busy in that period with work issues it was hard to devote to reading the contest stories.

I liked this piece for adding some side details to movie events. Nice to also die redemption into Hiccup's making tail fins for Toothless. In a way it was his chance to show he was not the self absorbed trouble maker everyone else saw him to be- he could finally use his skills to help someone who needed his help. Maybe the first time Hiccup is doing something for someone else, not his own status.

Finally. I like how you show that Hiccup was not the lonely outcast. He did have some supporters in Gobber and Fishlegs. Not close friends, but still they were people who liked him.