Ima fucking sob, thanks a fucking lot, now it’s harder for me to eat my popcorn

This is a very good story, but I admit that I'm confused about the timeline. The war is over, Kronos is trying to get revenge, the minor gods have their own cabins, Percy is dating Annabeth, and Percy has a new brother... but yet when Percy comes back from Alcatraz he mentions needing to fulfill the prophecy and then suddenly it's before the final battle... I really don't understand the timeline here. I'm also confused about the random insert of Richard, who seemingly was only necessary to drug and sexually assault Annabeth in order to hurt Percy for unexplained reasons. And how old was Richard anyways? Campers usually arrive around 12 years old on average, so how old is Richard that he's drugging and sexually assaulting someone? If he's older, then is he a contender for the prophecy? And what happened to him after Percy came back from being held prisoner? He just disappeared.

The scene with Poseidon was pretty weird. Poseidon in the books was always very in control of situations, and selective with his words. He was incredibly awkward here, and it really came across as OOC in a way that I feel weakened your story.

There's a lot of potential here, but it's also extremely confusing. What's actually going on? I don't understand what happened and I feel like by this point, things should be much clearer than they are.

Oh. My. FUCKING. gods.
Holy MOTHERFUCKING shit.
I cried a hundred times and I'm only on chapter 5.
I love this.
I recently watches 13 reasons why, which is about suicide.
This is great.
You are an AMAZING writer, and the little shits who tell you different are fucking birches.
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Jesus bloody Christ

Getting Major Lorax vibes here

And my hand is forced upon finding out this is a fucking Chaos story. I swear to god, I'm sick and tired of these god damn stories infesting everywhere.

Ok, what the fuck is going on? Oh you attempt to have pretty writing and shit, but none of it is fucking cohesive. First chapter, he cuts himself, yet he mentions having been in the styx. He mentioned how these nightmares are Kronos' revenge, yet here we are with the chapter saying KRONOS is manipulating people. So what the fuck is going on? Is this before TLO, just after he got the curse, has the final battle yet to happen despite it being clear that it has, like what the fuck. Especially because Michael is alive and the minor gods have cabins. You say in the AN that this chapter is set on the final battle, and that's all well and good, but again, in the previous chapter, it's been made clear that A, Kronos is defeated, B, the war is over, C, all god types have cabins, D, Percy is dating Annabeth. Then he leaves camp, and we find him on Alcatraz. Maybe I'm overreacting, but so far, the timeline doesn't make ANY sense.

Uhm... why is he cut when he has the curse...?

Cool and all, but I think the writings a tad too flowery. And idk, it’s getting a little repetitive. Just some friendly criticism

This account is probably inactive, but I'd say rewrite.

One of the greatest stories that will never get finished

I read up to chapter 18, this book is amazing, i love it, the only thing i would want to change is how confusing it is, it is rather hard to follow but i really like it, if you could clear up the plot i would def continue

2 words. What happened? What exactly were u trying to accomplish with that stilted language?

I’m absolutely shocked by this plot twist! That was sarcasm. The language is detracting even more, and what do u kno, ur character gets knocked out again! See what I mean? I know u like to add edits to your stories, but I think it might be better if u just rewrite this one. So much potential, and so far, you’re just pulling further and further from what the story should be. And once again, there’s a melodramatic, flowery monologue that ur character seems to recite every chapter one he gets incapacitated. It’s pretty pathetic. Still have high hopes though

Your character was incapacitated once again. And the language detracted from the plot ️. It’s looking slightly better though. I have high hopes.