Dammit, why are your chapters so short? Interesting story you got here. Heard about it through Errors in Continuity and thought I'd check it out. Have you considered a beta for the spelling and grammar errors?

I seem to have noticed that in this fic, your not putting in periods at the end of each sentences. Could you, by any chance, fix that?

intersting
no need to explain the mind sequence that much however a writing hint if you need to explain something in text instead of using parens (like this) which can disrupt the flow of a story and confuse a reader you can use a foot note marker like * or (1) and then at the end of your writing use the annotations to explain

* this is an example of a method that works if you only need to do this once or twice if 2 you can use ** to differentiate them

(1) this method works better if you have alot of these footnotes you can use however many you like with numbers this way without disrupting your narrative and most people understand what this is so if necessary they can scroll down and find them or use the control f find function to scroll between them and the main story!

i love it your protective crona is a side of crona that i only saw hinted at in the manga
a side i really wish could have been developed more fully
im enjoying the story though i sometimes think your soul, crona and raven are a bit out of character
but eh you do a good job over all

You should spellcheck and proofread chapters before saving, then read it over to make sure it makes sense before actually publishing it.

Pleaseee continue! I'm really enjoying this! I hope Raven or Crona gets the courage to ask each other soon! I'm dying of desperation to know what happens!

More please

Good, writer, you updated for me. You can have a muffin. Give your cousin a kick for me, unless they review. Love, Dark

First off I would like to say that this chapter was shorter than Kim kardashian's marriage, Crona needs to really grow a pair, Ragnarok should be turned pink and made female, and Raven really should have another shower scene, even if it's copy and pasted from the other chapter shower scene.

And I don't believe I misspelled anything, I think it was meant to be hump.

UPDATE DAMMIT! Seriously, I just got into this tale, but it is a good one and I hate waiting. If you update fast enough, I'll give you a muffin nasket... By the way, has your cousin reviewed recently? Love, Dark

I really liked it in the beginning but now it is getting off topic and I love this pairing I wish there was more of it

I love the story but I hope for it to focus on crona and raven liked It did in the first chapters

Good chapter, I don't really understand what's going on though... I understand the Titans want to get Raven back and all, but making most of the chapter just on that gets a bit boring.

WAHHHHHHH! I NEED AN ADULT! STARFIRE HUMP ME!

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