What us wrong with u. Dud dont make ne sound like a hippie. Anyway Matthew is 17 just saying. You cant end it like that

FUCK YOU

Best Ending Ever

Beautiful! I'm not even finished reading it, but I can't contain myself from writing a review! I am loving it so far.

I was actually listening to the Kolima Forest theme from the original Golden Sun when I read this! XD

Whew... this. Was. Amazing.

I'm telling you know that my heart hurt so much when Sveta was proposed to. The plot was great, the characters (including your new ones) were fantastic in personality and interaction with each other.

Even though it wasn't the ending I hoped for, I'm still glad it worked out in some way. Thanks so much for writing this.

Droory

Been a while since I've read a GS story and I'm glad to have found this one. Good plot, good story telling, good characters, good everything. I take it that there will be a sequel, too many unanswered questions. I hope to see more, and if you will excuse me I need to go reread Drops of Jupiter, I'm behind on that one ~GraysonPaladin, For Her Majesty Svetlana the First of Morgal

Must...keep...reading...this story is enough that it makes me overcome my laziness in order to read more -nod of nod-

Man, I love this story. As such, I loved the final chapter, as said as it was to see it end (but, my hopes were then sent skyward by the epilogue). For this specific chapter, I enjoyed just about everything. The battle scene was well done, which is hard to accomplish because battle scenes seem to be hard to write well, and the dynamic between Tyrell and Amiti during the fight was interesting to watch. The Karis and Tyrell moment made me squeal; it felt very well earned, and Tyrell's thought process during the lead-up was perfect.

The Sveta and Matthew sections were, as always, fun to read. Their chemistry is vibrant, and their interactions with Bentley were hilarious. Oh, Bentley. You really do right by that character. He caused by far the most grins through this story for me. The one thing with Matthew and Sveta is I slightly wish I could see how their sword training went. I understand why it was left out, though. One-shot potential? I could slightly feel the story leaning toward an end, but was still dismayed and a little shocked to see it actually come. Alas.

For the overall story, I have an issue picking out specific scenes because I really enjoyed all of them. I thought you were very consistent with throwing in a mix of everything; romance, sorrow, angst, humor, intrigue. The greatest thing about the story though, in my opinion, is the characters. You nailed the characterization on every character from what we are given in the game, and kept them consistently in that character the entire story. Amiti has the perfect kind of enigmaish personality you would expect from Alex's son, Tyrell is the perfect mix of rash/well meaning/actually smart underneath the dumb decision, and just in general all the characters were well done. Kudos to the original characters as well; they can make or break a story, and you fleshed them out well. Dinar was actually my favorite character in the entire story.

Along those lines, the chemistry between the characters was displayed perfectly. The natural way Sveta and Matthew interact, the way Matthew and Karis talk like siblings, the slightly (very slightly) haughty way Amiti talks to Tyrell. All done to perfection. A lot of the pleasure I get out of this story is just listening to the characters think and speak. Plot is obviously needed, and the plot was great as well, but good characters make or break writing, and the characterization you created was fantastic.

Speaking of the plot, I was happy to see a little tease at the end. Please continue! You're writing is so good, it was always a bright spot of my day, and I'd love to see where you'd take the other characters that have yet to be mentioned, where you'd take the plot to (some interesting tidbits about the Tuaparang). I guess the only overall criticism for the work as a whole I would have is that the pacing is sometimes a little bit off. Barely noticeable, and hard to deal with as perfect pacing is pretty much impossible. Overall, just wonderful. Great fan-fic. I'm glad you decided to expand this beyond the one-shot it started as.

VERY well-written story, this chapter being no exception!

The dialogue fits the characters very well and, unlike many other authors, your take on the use of Psynergy in combat feels natural and, while based on the game's mechanics, not forced.

Looking forward to reading the final chapters!

I think my favorite part was the action scene where Matthew tried to stop Sveta's wedding, but the monologue in the first chapter was still an outstanding setpiece, and it was what originally got me hooked.

Keep it up! If you do decide to do a sequel I'll probably end up reading it.

Write a m-rated Matthew/Sveta story.

Uh... The end, already? What the f*ck? Well, review first, souting later.

Favourite part? The wedding. And some of the Matt/Sveta fluff, too. Also the fighting scene in Barai Temple was well done (at first I thought that Amiti had been somewhat brainwashed ').

As for the Sparkshipping hints... Hell, you nearly made me forget I was a Stormshipper! Nice one on that, boy.

But now, back to the abrupt end... Hell, McCoy assasinated, Elindow vanished, and Dinar is still here? Obviously, he was the culprit (son he uses some claw-like weapons, huh?), but why did he feel the need to help the teens? Ho, true... He followed his orders.

In short, it was a good story. But I leave more experienced people criticize your work as an author; after all, I'm just a bookworm fanboy who happens to think a little (and uses fanfic as a medium to work his English lessons).

"How'd you get there so fast?"

"I ran."

"But it's a three-day-trip-"

"I RAN DAMMIT."

So very Tyrell. Excellent chapter.

I know what you mean when you say that you just wanted to get it finished and move on... but I will say that this chapter is more than alright, and if it means you have the opportunity to push forward to more exciting parts, then all the better.

Awwwwwww you make Sparkshipping so cute... and Amiti so scary with that last sentence. Once again, great characterization. Seeing Tyrell's emotional side was a treat, and more or less everything involving Karis and him flirting is well done and feels incredibly natural. It's odd, I keep geeking out over the Sparkshipping, yet I really never had thought that much of the pairing before. I think it is probably because this is the first time I've ever seen them shipped well. As I said before, their conversations and interaction feels spot on.

The Belinsk scene was good. I enjoy how you're building Sveta and Matthew's relationship: each chapter they seem more comfortable with each other as their interaction increases, even though they at this point are only friends. Matthew thinking of saying what she needs to hear to make her happy as a person beyond what would be easier for their relationship is a very nice touch in this regard. Their conversation, while short, it wonderful to read: your character dialogue is some of the most rewarding I've ever read. Also, I now have an incredibly humorous image of Bentley zooming around Belinsk like he was shot out of a cannon. I love that guy.

Speaking of character dialogue, this made my day ("How on Weyard did you get here?" He asked flatly. Tyrell shrugged. "I ran." The room was silent, as all eyes were on the unassuming boy. "Tyrell...that's a three day trip." Amiti said completely bewildered.). Once again, you paint a great mental image here of Tyrell moving like a machine. You can't deny that he and Garet have unconquerable spirit. This chapter had the ability to feel to over the place because of how much occurs in it and how often the tone shifts, but I never got that sense.

As I said earlier, Tyrell and Karis have some great dialogue here that touches on all aspects of their characters: their feelings for each other, Karis's anger at how dumb Tyrell can be, her forgetting her lecture at him after his display of emotion, Tyrell's prior-mentioned display of emotion, the segment where he thinks of how much she does for him. The ending was... interesting to say the least. You did a good job of making Amiti seem slightly suspicious leading up to the end, and I'm excited to where you take his character.

For me, Amiti (and obviously Himi as she was more of a plot device than anything in the game) is one of the more layered characters in Dark Dawn, and you can go a lot of different ways while writing him. Is he THAT jealous, is he possessed, is it a fake-out and is he not even about to attack Tyrell but defend him? So many cool ways to go.

I'm also glad to see that the story is branching off in different directions. I mean, of course it already had in some ways when Sveta was in prison/getting married and Matthew and the others were plotting to get her out, but in that case the plot was only slightly branching out and quickly merged again. To see the plot branch out a bit more from being focused entirely on Matthew and Sveta's relationships is a breath of fresh air.

Finally, I loathe to say I don't have any criticisms. I loathe to say this because while my overall goal is to commend authors for their work, I of course want to give them constructive feedback, and when I don't I feel as I have failed. The writing continues to be at a high level, the characterization is spot on, and the pacing (especially for a chapter with as much going on as this one) is consistent. As of now, I've got nothing but praise. Great job!