Pretty good but the sentences are too clumped together, try spacing them out more.

your grammar sucks

CONTINUE

It's good but you really need a beta... it is difficult to read.

R u dead? :(

Please tell me there will be more!

your idea of story is great, i love it. but the format of your story is not really inviting to read, still I tried it.

This is a really good story! Will you be finishing it anytime soon? If not I would love to know how the plot goes along!

please please please please! continue this story! I love it so much and I can't bare for it to stop here!

You clearly put a lot of time into this fic however the formatting made it a little hard to read and made it much more difficult to follow the story. I found numerous spelling mistakes and the plot didn’t make sense at times. A good idea that has a lot of potential if you fixed the errors.

I really like your Fanfiction and I hope you will Update soon.

You and your DAMNED LIES

Hi! I love your story, wrong-boy-who-lived is a topic that I like very much.
The only thing I wanted to say is that I would recommend you to use a Beta. It's not a flame, but I am a writer myself and I always ALWAYS have my works checked and proofread by a second person before publishing them. This way, the story will be more fluent and with less grammatical and syntactical errors and it will be more pleasurable to read... It bothers the reader after a while that there are so many mistakes and it takes the attention off the story... Good plot though!

Get a beta. This is unreadable.

Your history no has sense. You change de plot the one chapter to another, you need to fix this.