oh my damn...well i don't know about anyone else but i sure as hell ain't gonna get on your bad side lol. loved the story though i do have to give you props. hell i thought they was dead from all that torture for real. when i found out it was just a nightmare i was like thank the lord lol. man i felt sorry for gray...i mean don't get me wrong i felt sorry for the others as well it just you went into some details on his ass. all i could say was just let the poor boy die already...thats enough...he went through enough. usually some author can't sway from their style and come up with a different one but you...(stands up and claps) take a motherfucking bow cause you deserve it. hell i applaud you and i am so looking forward to more of your stories. until next time you talented ass author you ;)

Oh I makes sense now! Hmm... as for feedback. I liked it. Gory wonderland, we meet again. You do do that voice brilliantly.

Anyway, constructive criticism; Death's a big thing. Seriously. It's a common trap to fall into, one I do a LOT, thinking that the character somehow knows it's not real, they're not real, they're just characters who can be revived with a few words, a few sentences.

Imagine, right now, if your best friend, your oldest and most loved, died. Right now. A spear through their pelvis, legs like ribbons and blood like confetti. A look of absolute terror etched on their stone-cold faces. And then you saw your other friend, one who'd always been beside you, nailed to the wall through their legs and arms, eyes bulging out and fear forever deep into their souls. They are collared like a dog, forcing their head upwards for now and forever. Your head wouldn't just spin, you wouldn't just be sick. Your whole world would shatter and you would crumble with it. You would collapse, it would feel like someone had snapped your soul in two and taken the bigger half, leaving the other to rot in its lonesome.

Gray takes a while to pass out. He's already in incredible pain. I know he has a huge pain threshold, but his fingers are cut off (one by one, I presume) and that hurts like hell. It might sound like Gray's a sissy but seriously, definitely close to none of your readers have ever had their fingers cut off, and I'm pretty sure it's really hard to overestimate it. Again, I think if that's already happen, he'd be screaming, especially since this guy doesn't strike me as the painkiller type.

Yeah, he'd pass out if the cut was deep enough to reach his ribs enough to tear them out, either due to bloodloss from previous wounds or shock.

Atatomy speaking (feel totally free to disregard anything I say in these parts, since they're in Natsu's dreamland and therefore logic has no meaning. Or not. Whatever you wanna do, it's your most wonderful story) It would be really, really difficult to tear out ribs. Not only are they attached to the spine securely, there is a thick "band" of bone that's about half the width of your palm, that you should be able to feel in your chest, where they fuse together in the womb. (how the hell do I know this?) also bone is harder than some concretes, whilst being thinner. Whilst it is possible to smash and pull out these bones, bones tend to shatter rather than break neatly. Also since Gray is a FIGHTING BOY(!) His ribs have probably been broken several times, resulting in something called Wolfsbane (I actually have no idea what its called, I vaguely associate this word with it) priniciple, which means that the ribs grow back even stronger. I assume they've been broken before, he was having fist-fights when he was six.

Whenever I think of flaps I think of catflaps, which totally ruined the moment for me, but then again I'm really quite a strange person when it comes down to it.

All in all, a greatly satisfying read, if only satisfying my totally evil alter ego (whose name is Yflowerewaunl (Totes m'goats, no jokes)) I especially liked the ending, which satisfied my normal side. Gray can be cute too w LONGEST REVIEW I'VE EVER WRITTEN!

That was actually really good :) write more please

Wow, Natsu's mind. Is it wrong for me to have laughed after reading this. Poor Gray, and everyone else.

oh god that was the scariest thing I have ever read! good job though! I almost puked but made it to the end!

omg gruesome! but thank god it was only a nightmare Natsu! TT

I want - no, need - you to write like this again. There isn't enough darkness in the world of literature. There were sone points in this fic that I had to take a breather before anything left in my stomach decided to come up my throat.

I'm sending you mucho applause. Well done.

Gosh... That really was dark. Thank god it has a happy endind or else i would have killed myself! Good job!

Definitely one of the darkest things I've read on this site. You honestly gave me chills and made my stomach turn (which is good!) The gore was surreally vivid, very well written descriptions. I could visualize every moment of horror and got goosebumps.

Natsu's subconscious is really f'ed up! :P