Aslan said in LLW that he wanted his family safe. The Magnificent, Gentle, Just, and Valiant where his family and he was their guide their father and friend who knew when they needed praise or chastisement.

he only lost one of them Gentle, but with his hope he never lost that hope that she would return.

Amazing story! :) Love it SO much! :) I love the exact same books! :) I also like the Silver Chair.

More references to their lives as kings and queens - I can't get enough of those! Especially love the battle depictions, and Susan's suitors. x) These psychological portraits are really interesting. And, your writing is also very smart and enjoyable to read. :)

Corrections!

- "My brother Edmund is his name" - You know what I'm going to say. ;)

- "Edmund proved himself a thousand times over in our first battle though. He had faced the woman who had tried to kill him and his family and he had triumphed over her. His knighthood was merited a thousand times over," Repetition of "a thousand times over".

- "My brother Edmund, despited being wholeheartedly Just, never judged someone without fully understanding their situation, ..." Despited isn't a word; despite is, but it doesn't really suit this phrase since to refrain from judging someone like that is to be Just, yet you say it is "despite" his being Just.

- In Susan's section, "no matter the fact that" - it would be better to say "never mind the fact that". You can say "no matter how much/what/who/etc", but not this.

- "Lucy could drink a Dwarf, for pity's sake, into a stupor and not have a hangover" ; rephrase this, otherwise for a minute the reader thinks Lucy can really drink an actual Dwarf, bones and all. 'Lucy could drink a Dwarf into a stupor, for pity's sake, and not even have a hangover', for example. (By the by, I love imagining this part. )

Lovely chapter! I haven't actually read till the end of the Chronicles, so I'm not sure what happens to Susan; I read about Lewis saying she was caught up in "lipstick and nylon" and other modern, womanly stuff, and she ended up not believing in Narnia any more so that she never returned and fell away from her siblings in the process. It's good that you gave her this depths, because as always the greatest fault of "children's fiction" is that there are often blaring opportunities for character development that the author doesn't go into because the psychology would be too complex for a child to understand or care about. Which is why fanfiction is so awesome. :D

Small correction to make:

- "My sister Susan was her name." Same as with "My brother Peter" ; change this.

First of all, thanks so much for faving my "Couch Night"! I'm really glad you liked it. I came over to your profile and saw that you write for a lot of my favourite fandoms, so I'm taking a look around. :)

What I love the most about this chapter is the nostalgia, the sort of tender-heartedness with which each character speaks of their siblings. You've achieved that really well, and I must say I think Susan's part is my favourite because she refers to their actual lives as royalty and I've always been intrigued by that part of the plot that Lewis left out. The fact that they added that little part at the beginning of the Prince Caspian movie has always made me want to write something about 'that time' and how tortured they are about being kids again; it's a really interesting aspect of the story.

I think you could've maybe made their voices sound different; they're all adults as they're writing, I presume, but even though they have different things to say about each other I still think a difference in style would contribute to the personalization of each Pevensie.

Here are a few corrections that I came across while reading;

- "My brother Peter is his name" - this doesn't work, since 'Peter is his name' suggests a continuation of the phrase when coupled with "My brother". Either put "The high king is my brother, Peter is his name" or something to that effect, because here Peter is like a hinge for two nominal phrases that don't work together; "My brother Peter/Peter is his name".

- "He protected me, knew" - this would sound grammatically better as "knowing"

- In Edmund's section; "so it was obvious that the he and I"; erase "the"

- In Lucy's section; "and as he has many times put, not brave, courageous and faithful enough to be Valiant" There must be some sort of word omission because this doesn't make sense.

Onto the next chapter!

I enjoyed this very much. Well done.

:::giggles to read Peter was in love with a Willow Dryad:::

This is nicely written and thought out. I did like Aslan's commentary on Susan and that he blames himself a bit for what happened, in asking her to make so great a sacrifice.

I never would have thought anyone could write Aslan, but you did, and you did it wonderfully.

Great job. I loved this chapter and I loved the story.

-Caity :)

I had to comment- I love this so much! It was really smart how you wrote from each siblings perspective; how one persons observations or opinions would contradict another was realistic and intriguing. I feel that I learned most about them through their accounts of their siblings rather than their own respective chapters. I loved it!

What I liked most about this was the way you portrayed Susan. She is one of my favorite characters (behind Edmund!) and i think really that she is one with the most dynamic personality, there is so much depth to her. She's really quite different from her siblings and interesting because of it! However, I find most writers do not share my enthusiasm. So I was very pleased that you made her character what it was!

And the Edmund chapter rocked hard too, of course.

Good story, keep it up!

Wow. This was amazing! Thank you so much for writing it!

I especially love how you portrayed Aslan's thoughts on the Pevensies. I think they are quite moving :)

Aww, this is so sad! I love your wording, though. It's so beautiful! I like what you said at the end, with Lucy.

this was perfet i loved this story so much you should write another one.

THANKS TO LOT!

That was awe-inspiring. I'm so sad that it's over. Truly wonderous.

-Dyslexic Nerd

I think you did a brilliant job capturing Aslan's voice for this chapter, and that isn't an easy thing to do. I loved his thoughts on the four, and how you brought Bacchus in when describing Lucy's passionate nature really helped to round out the end of the chapter.

Now I'm going to go back and read the rest.

Thanks for sharing this story.