Hang in there, Hawke. It will take a lot of time (about 3 years) before Anders' resolve is fully crumbled. All you have to do now is keeping shamelessly pushing. ;)

This is nice. I'd love to see the friendship path. Hawke wants to make Kirkwall better, right? I assume it includes mages too. Moreover, Hawke would be a hypocrite, if he were kind to only Bethany and mean to all other mages. Anyway, good job!

Nice! I can't wait for the next chapter...

I personally would like to see this as friendship romance, I'm kinda interested in seeing how you'd write about this from Anders's POV, considering he was really into Karl in this story XD

Oh I love this story and the plot is wonderful please continue :3 and I say go for the rivalmance it's far more exciting than the normal friendmance ;)

I think this is a good start.

And I must complement you on how clean your prose is compared to many other writers. Everyone misses a typo, but too many people make dozens of errors, even drop the jaw ones in just their first chapter. Congrats!