I know it's been a while,but bump bump bump

Oh no! You havent updared in 8 years! This is such an awesome story but sadly seems to be forgotten.

Even though this has been tossed into the inevitable probably not ever going to be finished pile, I still thoroughly enjoyed reading it again :)

Oh boy. Well maybe Kate will move forward now and Miroku can see that Sango is not connected to it. Although I wish Kohaku was out of it too. Why did he have to go wrong? Anyways, awesome job! Please update soon!

-d101

Dialog's fine, but you ignore convention as to aligning text with the quotes, and this makes keeping the speaker straight confusing. By convention, you should only pair quote and text regarding the speaker together, even when that text doesn't include "he said/she said". You, on the other hand, invariably align text with a quote that is a response to the quote by the non-speaker. This adds a needless layer of interpretation for the reader to do, and is annoying (this was particularly evident during the conversation between Takeda and Steve). You also often leave proper names uncapitalized ("Ruger" is the maker of the gun, and thus a proper name).

Neither of these "errors" is critical, but they do get in the way of your story. I advise again taking the time to proofread and edit - this reads like a first draft posted in the excitement of having finished a thought (I recognize it because I've done it myself, and then felt the pain of re-reading online and being embarrassed by my own sloppiness). And you said yourself you were writing at 2am. If you take pride in your work you should want to feel good about the craftsmanship as well as the creativity of it.

Still, it's good enough to keep me reading.

I wish Sango would just assume that he is cheating and kick him out. And Poor Miroku having to play the double game. Anyways, awesome job! Please update soon!

-D101

Would have been more epic if he'd ran off while cuffed, but nice chapter anyways. Lookin forward to more police story goodness :)

Wow. Doesn't life have amusing timing? With luck Sango will learn what a jerk her boyfriend is without learning that Miroku was sorta using her for information. Anyways, awesome job! Please update soon!

-D101

*twitch twitch* Let's blow this joint! I meant ... cliff hanger as always... why oh why must you torture us so. :) I must let you know I just had to read that under the hawk eyes of my partner and smack dab in the middle of a meeting... you're THAT good. can't wait to read more

So you spell Colour like that right? Cool. Anyways, awesome job! It was nice to see Inuyasha walk in with Kagome but just a question, is he human? You might have described him and I missed it so that's why I'm asking. I'm too lazy to reread. Haha. Anyways, awesome job! I wonder who Miroku's old flame is. Please update soon but not too soon or your brain will overheat.

-D101

Wow, this is a great story(:! I can't wait forthe next chapter - I read all 7 chapter in an hour :03! Update soon pleases :D!

I'm sure we wouldn't have minded the whole shabang and more ;) lol... the truth, the whole truth and nothing but the truth eh Inuyasha... this would be interesting

You have an interesting imagination and a creative sense of timing. It is a pity you don't have the basics of writing down better. Maybe you're just in a hurry to post stuff, but your writing is full of spelling and grammatical errors. Simple things like the difference between "you're" and "your", for example, should be caught by the most cursory of proofreads.

So far I've been interested enough in the premise of this story to keep reading, but it is hard to get past the childish errors to what is clearly very promising 'meat'. Please, either get a beta or slow down enough to do a proper proofing of your work.

(The idea of a high-performing academic falling into petty theft is implausible, but not impossible, so Miroku as criminal is not a stretch - hell, canon has him as exactly that! But Miroku would never be a pawn in anyone else's game, and he would be at least a moderately successful thief, like Block's Bernie Rhodenbarr. Miroku as undercover agent is, of course, easier to reconcile in a love story with a cop. Looking forward to what you do with it.)

you have a shocking way about your writing, you know that? Grr, I wish I could be that revealing with things. *sighs* I envy you, you realize this, don't you? Please keep writing! You're so great!

Whoa whoa! Miroku is a cop? Like FBI? undercover? That is awesome! I did not see that coming! and poor Sango... or rather poor Takedo. He won't live long after Sango finds out about him. Awesome job! Please update soon!

-D101