You have a lot of spelling errors. Like a lot. And in the way that you use the wrong term Example you use loved when the correct way in that specific sentence should be love. You use the -ed a lot and it's REALLY hard to simply move on from it. But don't get down about my critique! It was a really great story. I felt I was PLAYING an alternate ending for FFXIII! It was great honestly. A lot of emotion! Just some spelling errors.

So SWEET! So ROMANTIC & So EROTIC!
My favorite author of the MONTH

love,
Ikarus-chan

I looooved this! And I'm gonna read de sequel ASAP.

This story is absolutely amazing :) I loved how you brought Snow and Hope together and a plus is hot hot the lemons were! Loooooved it! Great job :D

ShizuBabe 3

Great story!

Wish this was real...I wanna watch!

btw, that was in no way a flame or anything, I can see you hold great potential, so keep it up okay?

I really really wanted to read this, cause I heard it was a good story... but I just can't, please PLEASE get a beta-reader for this. There are so few SnowxHope stories out there...

... i have to say. i LOVED this i never wanted it to end!
why is fantasy always better than reality?

OMG! just putting this out there, this is amazing! i cant sleep i cant stop reading this!
PUBLISH THIS!

You know, I'm perfectly fine with reading sex scenes like these. But for some reason, when it comes to these two, I just can't. No idea, whatsoever. And it's not because it's ay sex, not at all. If it's Naruto and Sasuke,from Naruto, or Natsu and Grey, from Fairy Tail, I'm perfectly fine. It could be because if something like this actually happened in the game, this is like exactly how they would talk and act. You pretty much pinned their character down on the head. Congratualations, congratulations indeed.

This is such a cute story. I'm really enjoying it so far. :D

This was the first story I read from you and I was pleased. there were a few grammar mistakes (you seemed to confuse past/present/future tenses as well as singular/plural words) but the plot and characterization was so brilliant that it was easy to overlook it. This was an enjoyable piece to read and I am looking forward to future work coming from you. Take care :)

awsome chap, i was dying to read this chap and then my comp. broke! wait was totally worth it though, glad they got a happy ending, was worried that hope's dad wouldn't let them at first, any way awsome story!

WOW... WOW... I'm luv the developments in this chapter: The Cocoon's situation, Bartholomew refusal to the relationship, the separation, n happy ending with a combo sex. I think I died for a second at the end. Please don't let this be the end :(

I'm still on the look out for a sequel *squeal*