Please continue! You get stop there! It was getting good!

I love this! The idea is great! I just can't wait to see what will happen next, so please, please write more soon, onegai?

-Jen

hey, this chapter was great I mean..

you know what i mean

you are great and your story is great,.

just the way i like it.. its not boring like other fics ive read.

hmm so. would ya care to drop the 6th chapter?

im dying of frustration here for waiting toooooooo long..!

USUI_

hehe

Awesome story! I have some advice too. The only thing that seems kinda strange is that last time we saw usui's p.o.v he was interested by her, not really in love. So I'm kinda confused on the pacing of the last couple sentences. Other than that, SPECTACULAR job! Can't wait to read more!

Hi , I'm back , you should know who am i , right ? LOL

Apparently Im too lazy to sign in review , sorry I didn't read your mail , it got buried under too much junk mail ;/

So when i re-checked your story again , wow , 5 chapters already . (I could never sit down long enough to write more then 3 a month)

You sure have gone far from "hating to read (or was it write) more then 800 words) hahas .

Well if you want my critique for your work , i would say you've done quite a great job , I was kinda tired as shit when I started reading , and now I'm actually awake enough to give you a review . Only thing I felt weird about your story is the random lyrics coming out from nowhere , sometimes it just pops in normally without link . It could be just my problem , don't mind me much ;D

Oh you need a beta ? I can help you with that , I kinda reformatted my comp and all my drafts are gone , not in the mood to write new stories , but if you need me to help go over yours / give ideas or w/e be sure to find me .

Fannypoosaysomnomnom

I didn't think it was terrible at all! It's really hood so far; I love the storyline, the AU setting, all of it :)) you are portraying their characters perfectly as well.

Anxiously awaiting the next chapter!

this is soooo good. please update soon :)

A. xx

I've just read the story and it's very interesting and fresh, keep updating please! :)

that makes sense

and yes, i do love this chapter!

I wonder how Misaki is gonna react?

Can't wait to see! XD -

A very very good ,no, amazing chapter. I have to say that the character's conversation flow very well! Usui's comebacks are as witty as they are in the manga. Misaki is as feisty as ever ;D I nearly jumped when I read that he kissed her O.O OMG! Not at all rush, in fact it just made Usui more Usui XD Since he is always err unexpected?

Not a terrible chapter at all ;D And I wish to throw you flowers if this is 'crap' cause this is some amazing stuff. LOL XD

You can find beta-readers at the top of the page in-between the buttons 'forum' and 'search'

Terrible? I thought it was amazing :D Cant wait for next chappie!

I really like this fanfic I've been reading it on the go on my mp3 player. XD I'm totally shocked to see so little reviews, it makes me sad. The pacing is fine and it is so rare to see long chapters for a KWMS fanfic. It makes me happy to see all the time and effort you put into your writing.

Only one complainant. 200 yen pretty much equals 2.00 (maybe a little less) in American dollars. ;;; I thought I'll just point that out for the next time. Until than, keep up the awesome work and can't wait to see what happens next!

~KJ

lol... too lazy to log in (i'm even too lazy to upper case letters when necessary, HAH!). anyway, I think you deserve a "well done" for this chapter. I didn't see anything particularly off-putting, so, all good in the hood! _

I spotted just the one 'of' that's supposed to be 'off' in this sentence, "Misaki pushed herself of the swing, relived." And now that "ctrlv'd" that, 'relived' should've been 'relieved'.

If there was anything else, I couldn't really remember, because your writing (and your story) is so god-damn captivating! It just makes me want to read line after line, to know what's gonna happen next so much that I don't even take notice of the mistakes. hahah! i suppose that could be a good or a bad thing. it means the mistakes you make aren't distracting the readers, however, there will always be the miss nit-pickies in the world. (n/b: For the record, I'm not one of them, but you said to criticize, so there ya gooo)

Anyway, I don't think you need a beta, I lubsss ur writing the way it is now. Simple yet eloquent. All you really need to do is maybe go over the chapters an extra time before posting them. Since all of your "mistakes" are easily avoidable! If you can, update soon! Estoy muy interesado! (See? You've made me so happy, my long-forgotten Español is coming out! haha!)

Cheers,

Snow

thankyou! (bows)

Also, the character building, i think, was just the right amount. It was very informative and gave me a good insight into Misaki's thoughs and past. It also made me rethink the father's character becasue from the start i've always hated him. It also told me of the hard times that she has had to face and made me realize just how much stress she has gone through and just how MUCH that this whole things has CHANGED HER LIFE.

All in all, another awesome chappy!

Can't wait to see what happens next! XD :) -

PS I like how you had the shorter sentences and repeated words here and there, very effective!

great start! there isn't much to pick at with regards to your writing. It exudes the aura of someone that more than comprehends the English language, structurally and grammatically.

the only things you need to be mindful of, really, are the inconsistencies with some of the canon charcters' names. For example, Satsuki's nephew, in this story, is called 'Aio', but it is actually 'Aoi', Hyoudou Aoi. Another thing, the elite university's name... In the manga, the rival school is named 'Miyabigaoka'. I'm not sure 'Miyobgku' (or whatever) was on purpose or was a mistake.

That's all I really wanted to point out. It's great that you've given us 4 chapters to start off with, as it is hard to tell sometimes whether a story is worth the read or not by it's first chapter. I look forward to the continuation of this story!

Til then, Adieu!

Snow