This is me again, it seems I already reviewed this chapter, so I’m reviewing it again as a guest.

I didn't really see anything new to comment on with this chapter, but perhaps the next one will have something for me.

This story, is, wonderful.
Especially now that, the author, has, discovered the use of, the, comma.

I agree in terms that I also don’t see Harry staying mad at Dumbledore, however, isn’t it also said that Harry had Lilly’s temper?

I would think Harry would have exploded in anger, however, he would eventually calm down when Dumbledore explains everything.

Loved this so much, who needs sleep? Aha ha I am very glad you wrote a sequel, you write wonderfully! Kept me hooked all 28 chapters :)

I love your Dumbledore! Most stories I come across with Slytherin!Harry or Harry being good friends w Slytherins instead of Ron, etc. there's always a Manipulative!Dumbledore and Dumbledore Bashing, but your portrayal is the best!

Just started this story last night, really enjoying it. Had to comment on Lily's record collection, since several of the albums are in my favorites as well. I wonder if Bob Dylan's Greatest Hits was included in the collection, because I'd love to see Harry and the others serenading Draco with "Positively 4th Street" *GRIN*

Red

I’m enjoying this for the most part. However you’re using commas for too much and far too uneccessarily than you need to and it disrupts the flow of the narrative. There are also a few moments where instead of using a comma where it should be you’re putting period in there instead. You might need to seriously consider going through and editing the chapters otherwise the story won’t flow the way it should.

Perhaps I am judging too soon but it seems like everyone else in the slither squad has something they are good at except for Harry. I know he's the designated leader but he doesn't really stand out in any way and it kind of makes him a boring, meh sort of character. And by stand out I don't mean he should be more powerful than everyone else just that it would be neat if he had some sort of niche that he stood out in. Still a great story though can't wait to keep reading

did you just quote Narnia? I saw a Narnia reference!

This is the best Harry Potter fanfiction I've read. The characterization is so good and meaningful. If I were to name how Harry is different in this fanfic than the original, I would only need one phrase: more thoughtful. His thoughtfulness then cascades into a captivating, complex character, making all the deviations from the original make sense and meaningful.
The move to have a group of six instead of three for the main friends was brilliantly done. Some authors struggle to give unique personalities to multiple characters. The way you give each of the six some quirk (and have it develop in various ways) allows you to show real personalities without isolating them from others.
Also, it should be said, the plot deviations are great choices, especially the change from year 1 to year 2 on how the adults are involved with solving the basilisk-chamber of secrets problem (i.e. they trusted Harry's suspicions and acted on them, etc.). Of course, the original allows for a focus on the coming-of-age aspects, but I simply find your route more believable (and your in-text comments to that point were amusing and delightful). After all, why not kill the basilisk with a rooster?
All in all, really great work. Perhaps an unintended brilliance, but the fact that you begin "in media res" and thus require knowledge from the original allows the reader to focus on your contributions, highlighting what makes your story surpass the original.

lovely start!

At the beginning it looked like a good fanfic, although you clearly suffer from a typical leftist problem of not being able to look at things from the other side's perspective, thus your portrayal of most of Slytherins as "evil bigots". What I cannot overlook why I'm stopping on this chapter, is the strengthening feminish propaganda that serves no real purpose in this story, undermines development of male characters and is completely at odds with real world.

How does Daphne Greengrass, a pureblood witch, know what a muggle police officer is or muggle Parliament? Or muggle anything? It's a little detail, but the devil is in the details you know.

Love the attention to detail with how arrogant Slytheirn. Supposedly clever and ambitious, yet their password is Salazar! As in, Salazar Slytherin! I am sure nobody will guess that. Gryffindor, despite being supposedly stupid have a 10 times better system. It makes me frustrated just thinking about it. Nice work.

snape is a git