Great writing on the battle scenes!

Omg this was great! But a little bit of critique:

maybe you could sort the fight scenes out into a different story, or make them shorter, or at the very least put them before the part with Reyson and Tibarn. According to your summary, character choice, and even title, the part with Tibarn and Reyson should be the climax/main focus of the story. With all the fight and action scenes, it seemed almost like it was kind of just thrown in there as a side detail. If you were aiming for that kind of approach, I'm sorry for nagging at you, because you certainly would have nailed it if you were trying to make it seem like one of those "oh yeah, and there's an elephant in the basement btw" things :). But, I think otherwise it was just a tad bit too cluttered for it to be the main plot. It was a really good story though, and I really did like it! It was really funny haha now we need to see the aftermath! ;) good job!

I thoroughly enjoyed myself. :D This was hilarious as well as having a dash of action. Nice work!

I disagree with The Silver Haired Maiden; I really liked this, especially the fight scenes. They're vivid and interesting, without feeling overblown at all. It's really nice to see a fic where the relationships of the characters aren't the sole focus - there's plenty of that on the site already, and something like this is a bit more of a rarity.

I will say it feels a little disjointed at times, like the whole thing doesn't flow well, especially around the scene breaks. And I'm not quiiiite sure how I feel about the GBA crossover with the Elysian Whip. But overall, this is a pretty nice fic.

When I read Mist yelling, "Ike, get down!" I pictured him standing on a chair trying to reach a cookie jar.

I don't even...

But anyways, just a tip- shorter fight scenes, and LESS. People are gonna get bored and skip most of it for yaoi.

Cool story, though! :)

Haha, I was laughing from the first line XD (Memes can take over your life...) I love how you tied it in with the battle and how you made it very...er... believable. (THIS IS CANON, DAMNIT!) And lol, with whips? Really? I think I love you. Honestly I wonder if Janaff and Ulki would be used to that sort of spectacle by this point... -winkwink- WELL, it was well worth the wait~ Oh, and you might want to go to a shrink or something if the characters are talking to you. o.0;; (btw, where's Leanne?)