Nice, evocative piece in such a short story. I enjoyed how you had it revolve around the theme of cold. Liara's thoughts and regrets come across very strongly and you summarize what happened previously very well.

'...seen as a betrayel...' minor typo.

aw sad liara is sad. so anyway, this was a pretty poignant little piece. there are a lot of passive verbs in here but that's okay cuz liara's keeping us out of her innermost self. she's like that. aloof and detached and all. no one gets to see her hurting, so she does all her hurting alone. poor girl, er, omnisexual alien what has a girlish figure. so in conclusion, it might have greater impact if you let us get a bit closer, but it's written well enough that it still comes across as a sad moment of self reflection.

Cold, it felt cold in her office. ** Hmm, feels kinda redundant.

I like the look into Liara's mind, her regrets and pain, her thoughts and fears. You did well with that. This is an interesting little piece, and I'd kind of like more, maybe a follow up chapter?

Some of the writing could be improved though, lot's of adverbs, use of the words cold (And though I get that it's the title, you could show us the cold, rather than just say it. Show us how it freezes her, almost paralyzing against the warmth of her skin, leaching out any hope of heat.)

betrayel * Betrayal.

You could use italics too, to really bump it up aesthetically. Add a little more drama to it. Some of the sentences are choppy and need a rework, but the basics are there and after I got used to it, I liked it so well done.

This is a rather sad look into Liara's mindset between ME1 and ME2, but I think you got her character down quite well. :)

Not bad, i think it reflects Liara surprisingly well. Wouldnt mind reading more.

Hello, popped over from BSN from one of the links in your sig. I like this piece, nicely done! Artful repetition of the word "cold". I think you've written Liara quite in-character, I can just imagine her thinking those thoughts in my mind's eye.

Good job! :)

Great story! Poor Liara... How can anyone not love her for what she did for Shepard? Thanks for writing this. God bless!

Great idea backing the piece! I loved how you made the story revolve around "cold", playing with the word's meaning. Sentence structure wasn't always the greatest (run-ons), but nice idea :D

Not bad. A small, thematic oneshot that is decently written. I liked it.

For your improvement, I felt like it meandered about without really getting to the point direclty enough. In terms of writing, it felt very choppy and redundant in some parts.

All told, though, I enjoyed it. Nice work :)